you should continue this

:-) :-) :-) :-) :-)

If you're going to write a story that has nothing whatsoever to do with a series, I recommend that you not use its characters for your story. Really, now... Pennsylvania? You called this a Sailor Moon fanfic because it features Serena and Darien, but if you substituted "Sally" and "Dan" no one would ever know.

The story itself, however, is not bad, but it is unpolished and perhaps somewhat rushed. Spend more time cleaning up your work next time.

okay... cute story line. you could have slowed down a whole lot. this story took place over how many DAYS and YEARS yet, it was still very short. i like it, but it's very rushed. if you want, i could try and do a joint writing thing and re-write it maybe. this is not to ofend you at all. this is just a help full hint. also, what might be good is a beta reader. they would tell you their opinions before you put up the story. so you know what to change before people like me don't come and bash it. if you mad, take my coments and put then in the burn caldrin and rost them. write me about anything... okay? outie! Krys

i love this fanfic it is really sweet and cute i love it i hope u write more

::le sigh:: so sweet... awww! ;) more?

AAAHHHHHHHHHHHhhhhhhhhhhh...

wow1 that was a great story! i LOVED it! it was SO interesting!

aww soo sweet, maybe a little rushed, but still real kawaii!

SPIFFY! I Liked it!

AWWW... that's soooo cute!

That was a really good story!