Lovely. Poor Viola's grief and torment for all three of the main players in her life, as well as herself, is plain. And you wrote it in a way that honors The Bard. The rhythm is smooth, the language similar though easy to understand, and Viola seems very much in character. Well done.

Viola is AWESOME! :D

My favorite character in "Twelfth Night!" :)

wow-very cool

Very well done. Excellent piece of work this is, I was very happy to see some 'Twelfth Night' stories! Shakespeare was brilliant, as are you. Are you perhaps some long-last descendant of Shakespeare? I'm kidding, ;) , congratulations on writing this wonderful story.
Keep writing. If all pieces turn out this good, then they will all be lovely indeed.
Cheers!
-elvesmagic010, loyal Twelfth Night fan.

I love it, it was beautiful.

Like it lots. Then agian I am just obsessed with 'Twelfth Night'. You captured Viola's character very well.

This is a good attempt, well done. Nice writing.

Take note, though, that it's Twelfth Night with an

'n', not Twelfth Knight with a 'k' - that's the

knight in shining armour, not night, the opposite

of day! Lol! And it's Cesario with an 's' not

Cezario. But that might be an American adaption

of it, I don't know. Keep it up, though, your

writing's nice.

Ta,

quill-angel

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Oh this is lovely! You have a poetic style, and this story is so insightful, you capture the character of Viola perfectly! Good job! (and well done on not writing something on Romeo and Juliet... Not that I can talk, since my first two Shakespeare fics were mostly RJ *blush*)

Very good. You are obviously a very talented writer. I admire that you didn't take on the task of Shakesperian English when you didn't feel you knew how. This story is just as effective in prose.

It's very nice! I love the play Twelfth Night.