Wow... this was great. You definitely got Mireille's subtle humor down. I definitely laughed over the imagery of the hat, and at the tea ceremony part, haha.

i loved it. your writing is very mature, yet still has a young, fresh humor to it. I especially like the part where Mireille said she almost sat on Kirika on the sofa. that was so cute.

ah. its nice to read some well-written material once in awhile, ne?

This story is very, very good. I like the melancholic narrative with both points of view. I am really impressed.

Wonderful story! Your fic captured both the closeness and the uncertainty of Mireille and Kirka's relationship. We get so little of their inner lives in canon, that I was fascinated by your take on them here. I especially liked your Mireille.

Ouch. Talk about a punch in the gut. Wonderful piece of writing. I especially like the way you build the tension up, brushtroke by little brushtroke, until resolution comes so naturally that a moment later would be too late. Perfect timing on that.

I tend to agree with your own comment that the ending is a bit too hurried. I think it goes down to very little things, such as Mireille's dialogue part in "Slice me... (...) my own preference" being a little weak when placed next to the emotion rush you've just portrayed (and quite well, I must add). The last part, with Kirika going back to sleep, is all right.

Anyway, great, inspiring work. Now I only wish I could write that well.

Wow, this has got to be the best Noir fic I've read. It'd be cool if you could continue this fic. This is probably going to go to one of my favorites!

Wow...this is the first dramalike fic that I haven't considered flaming...I try not to flame, but even if I were the creator of flaming, I couldn't flame this fic. Too bad you probably aren't continuing...

I don't normally post reviews, but this has got to be one of the most inspiring stories I have ever read. The quality of your work is astounding, and you've effectively captured the characters' personalities in a way I didn't think was possible, with only text.
Thank you, and please keep writing. !

Delightful fic. I enjoyed reading it. You are a skillful writer of description and dialogue.

You've mastered the impossible and actually portrayed Kirika so... Kirika-ish. The ending's sweet.. X3 Anyway, I loved this. I just loved how everything's so... Noir-y but with a different style, different... I'm horrible with words. XD Anyway, wonderful job.

OOps! Ehehe . . . I guess part of my review disappeared. I meant to suggest that you fix the plural/singular conflict in the first sentence, add an "of" after lost, (also in the same sentence) and maybe keep the tense the same throughout the piece. That's it for critiquey-ness.

I think you've expressed a lot of meaning in these two short chapters! Kudos to you! _

YAY, you updated it!

I was expecting a multiple chaptered fic, but finally, 2 chap fit very well. I think your try to express Kirika's thoughts was quite successful!

I long to read the end of Liberi Fatali as well, courage ;)

You... are continuing this are you? Or was this the last part...? ; Maybe it was, but in that case it will leave you free to finish Liberi Fatali eh? EH? _ I think you did the get-into-kirika's-head job quite fine, since no one know how she really is thoughtwise (the anime aint really informatic on this part is it? :D) any potrait could really be a good one, and I think you did a marvelous job.

Now, write some more Noir action, you rock on it :D

That was so beautifully written.

EEk! -.- Tense changes all over the place! It does seem like it was written fast. But I really liked the ending dialogue.

"The hands of the clock had lost much its luminous glow by this time, but I could still see its faint outline pointing towards ten-thirty. Hours later I will have to rise to leave for the airport."