Can i date Motoko Aoyoma? Uhh... i went to your site and it just got wierd so you can e-mail me at "wlw86@hotmail.com" if you need anymore information.
I liked the ending, that was funny.
check your grammar, you make little mistakes here and there. I could proof read it for you if you want.

I feel sorry for Shinobu! Watching the man of her dreams kiss another girl@_@ She must be heartbroken!

[urges to kill newB rising...must resist]
^_~ oh sorry bout that. i always get that way if i find a hint of any S.I.'s ...but i'm being too quick to judge, just don't make 'Cydni' a 'Mary Sue' okay?
in case you don't know:
'Mary Sue' : author created character, simply perfect in every way, flawless, has unmatched powers, and every character of the opposite gender falls hopelessly in love with him/her. (sometimes even the same genders!)
Mary Sue =BaaD! (Gr!)

kinda short but that's okay, keep writing..you'll get better...more background, bring out the whole cast and all that stuff.

~ja

Well that was good, and I 'll say more later, but I liked it!

Picky about who's reviewin' you huh? Well you did very well in this fic, you got Su's miscevious nature down to the note. Except a few spelling errors and the fact that Su is an extermly talented musician, this is a good story.
~Su fan "Krimson" ^__^

And for the record Su isn't from India, her voice is just that way.