I think i could have written this alot better...Should i just delete it?

AW! what will u do? what will u do?

Anime Gal

GEWD: yes_ Seto's mine all mine..*evil laugh*hahahaha

Yami GEWD: sure he is_

GEWD: I wanna join, you can have Yugi, but I want Seto_

Hey! (Happy Birthday soon) It's me! I'm reviewing, as requested.

Hm, interesting story. Not much of back story for "Nikuki" (you, I'm assuming), so the story seems kind of rushed into. Of course, if you plan to write her a story of her own, I'd suggest extensive character development.

Also, did you name your character with a meaning for her name in mind? Because according to my dictionary, "Nikuki" "flesh tree" or "flesh spirit". If that was what you had in mind all along, or if my dictionary is a filthy liar, forgive me.

The following is a mild accusation, not meant to be a flame, but if you think you will be offended, please stop reading here.

This fic seems to be more of a personal fantasy than a fic with a developed plot and well thought out original characters. Though these are very fun to write, they aren't very fun to read as an outsider.

Most of us would love to have the Yu-Gi-Oh cast as our best friends, with two of the cutest guys fighting for our affections, but those fantasies are best kept inside our heads.

That doesn't mean you should stop writing though, and please don't let my comments discourage you. You have a talent for writing suspenceful and dramitic works, and have a good grasp of what good writing should look like. I admire your talents, I merely suggest you take your writing away from fufilling personal fantasies.

This, however, is simply my opinion. If you disagree, feel free to ignore me. I've tried to be as constructive as I can, for the sake of helping a fellow authoress.

Best of luck on your B-day, and for the rest of your life

-KitKat

hehehehe can't wait to see what Kaiba is doing there. Is Marik going to come in soon? PLEASE UPDATE!

Anime Gal4

GEWD: very well done*cheers*

Yami GEWD: and it has Kaiba..very good_

GEWD: please read some of my fics to please..er..our fics

Yami GEWD: _ and update soon