Not bad. I like it. I've only read the first chapter so far, but I'm looking forward to the next one. Keep it up.

You need to contiue the story, or this chapter was for nothing.

Dude, why don't you type NORMALLY so it doesn't make my eyes go all buggy. And you know whot? You know whot's funny? I wrote a story just like yours a long time ago! Hm. And... I posted it! A long while ago. So... this creates a little ... problem. And it isn't my fault.

Oh my eyes! Da PAIN! OH DA HUMANITY!
faints
after 3 hours...
"Ughh... my HEAD hurts... (joke!.) What happened?" looks at the screen and fainted... yet again and again and again...
Joke! I just wanna point out to put more spaces. Have mercy on me!
... so... where's Eka? mischivous grin ... where's Felice? oh my gosh you ARE a player... hehehe Where's Eka and Felice? I want Eka and Felice! WAH! ...
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Ok... I'm pretty sure you know who I am now... right? RIGHT? RIGHT? Like am I talking to a wall here? ... oh yeah... I'm talking to myself again... That was dumb... oh well!
K! Ja ne! Read my fanfic!
. -Rena Jewels

One word - spacing

Heya Jedd! Or should I say Rei_Blazehart? D

Anyways, on with the review:

The truth is I have no idea what the story is about. I dunno what Thousand Arms is...

They plot is ok (I dunno how to judge this... I HAVEN'T SEEN THE FREAKIN' THING!). The grammar, what can I say? Almost flawless!

I have only one problem. The paragraphs are too "blocky". My eyes hurt when I read them. I suggest that you separate the dialogues from the narrative part.

Ex:

BOOM! Three brilliant explosions blasted beneath the thugs, spiraling them to the sky until only a lone star is left. Meis began laughing, as he patted his swor.

"Well, at least you didn't snap this time, buddy!" and continued laughing, as finally he remembered why it was so familiar.

This was how he met Sodina. "Excuse me, um sir" whispered the girl as she tugged his robe yet again.

He turned to the girl, and gasped. She was blushing deeply in scarlet, and trying not to look at him, and whispered.

"Thank saving me."

Okies, that's all. Good job JEDDAI! XD Kass

Yahoo! A new TA fic! Its been forever since anyone added a new fic! It was really funny!

"The Spirits have a REAL sick sense of humor!"

Cool. Hey...since it appears Sodina and Jyabil came back...what about Schmidt?

Updatey!

**Starfall4790**