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| twistedmic 2004-10-20 ch 1,  | abuseVery good fic as a stand alone one-shot, I think it may be even greater if you added another chapter, or a tie-in one shot, involving everyones reactions to Shinji's suicide. Mainly Asuka, Hikari and Rei (and possibly Touji) though the choice is completely up to you. Hope to see more of your writting soon. |
| Priest 2003-12-11 ch 1, | abusethis was very sad, but i know what you ment in your post rant, im like that also. Ja-ne =(!_!)= |
| izzaku 2003-10-24 ch 1, anon. | abuseTruth hurts right? Yep, this fic captures entirely how sad Evangelion actually is, without all the WAFFy or weird stuff in it. Excellence. |
| Spiritblade 2003-10-22 ch 1, anon. | abuseA good story. Embittering but all too true. You could, chief, lengthen to story to its final bitter ending. You have the framework set up already. Ja ne. |
| GUyverBlack 2003-09-21 ch 1, anon. | abusecan you make a second part to show how the react to his death or make a series why someone him before he comptly lost. |
| Yue's Lady 2003-09-16 ch 1, | abuseoh my... this is quite like my friend celestial blossom's depression fic...but a difference remains. this is a good fic...despite the unhappy ending. the only thing i can nitpick about is 'role call' which is actually 'roll call'. but i'm just being fussy. this is good...short though. But err...in my personal opinion...you do much better with humor fics. much much better. this isn't really what i'm used to reading from ur fics. but it's good. |
| Kevin 2003-09-16 ch 1, anon. | abuseExcellent. I like the way the story flows; by skipping ahead of time in certain parts, the fanfic only urhter oozes the emotive language, especially the solid ending at the end of each 'block'. It doesn't leave the reader time to think, although the ending was kind of guessable. But they, it's hat you'd normally expect from a dark fic, and I praise your fantastic graphically imagery to describe the way Shinji really feels. Lonelieness does killer the inner child. Great work! |
| Belgarion213 2003-09-16 ch 1, | abuseThis is Fantastic. Truly as others have said you have captured the essance of Shinji Ikari. The only thing I could recomend to make this better would be the reactions, or did he die after EOE? |
| squiddy 2003-09-15 ch 1, anon. | abuseawesome stuff |
| dude 2003-09-15 ch 1, anon. | abusethat was pretty good...but you should write a small sequel about how people react to it...just a suggestion...but it was a great story |
| Macavity the Mystery Cat 2003-09-15 ch 1, | abuseDark and angsty, just the way I like it. Very depressing. I enjoyed it. |
| Guilgamesh 2003-09-15 ch 1, | abuseThat was a good fic, very short but so complete, you captured the essence of the character very well, i mean, thats exactly how i envisioned Shinji Ikari, although i wouldn`t be able to express it as good as you did, and i agree that nobody can live a life of pain without someone to keep you together, thats just the human nature. Once again, great fic, now i want to read more of your storys to see what you have, peace, out. |
| RudyHenkel 2003-09-15 ch 1, | abuseVery good; is this your view of what would happen if Misato was not there to console Shinji after the death of Kaworu? |
| Optimus Magnus 2003-09-15 ch 1, | abuseGod damn, that was some sad stuff |
| ChiBi HenTAi AnGeL 2003-09-15 ch 1, anon. | abuseAnd to think that I had gotten over my depression... very deep and moving, especially the last scene... |