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gregory 2006-07-10 . chapter 3
I wish you would post the next chapter because this place was a bad one to leave off at.
link2143 2006-01-22 . chapter 3
That was an awsome story. Please keep writing!
bizarro4 2005-10-30 . chapter 1
this seems like a great start, i've always wondered what's going on in the heads of DBZ characters, they never seem to do too much of that in the show, and especially not for main characters. i really like the mother/son interaction between Gohan and Chi-Chi, great job!

i also want to thank you for your review for my fic, "disconnection." i do know that Mega Mom is Chad's mom, and i've actually written a future chapter (not posted yet) where it's addressed, but i may cut it, since it's not really central to the story. thanks again!
smokie 2004-12-05 . chapter 3
wtf are you ever going to update
Xyex 2004-05-15 . chapter 3
w00t! Much fun to read. I like the idea for this, tried something similar before but it didn't turn out to well. On the negative side I did notice a few tense errors but nothing to major. Can't wait 'till you update. ^_^
Andross937 2004-02-04 . chapter 3
PLEASE CONTINUE! This story is really well done. I kind of wonder how Gohan figured out the Instant Transmission technuiqe, but I suppose his father could have contacted him through King Kai and explaned it to him. So, it makes sense. This story has plenty of potentail and is very well done. I await your next update anxiously. See ya!
dragon_game 2003-12-09 . chapter 3
Good story.
Update soon.
Very interesting twist.
Josh Maxwell 2003-10-22 . chapter 3
Cool story. I always did hate the Saiyaman idea so I'm glad you aren't using it. Keep up the good work and please update soon.
Wispyspark 2003-10-19 . chapter 3
hm, a scientific view on ki or life force engergy intersting.
PsYChO 2003-10-18 . chapter 3
WOah...

Holy...I'll keep the expletives in check, can't trust these ff.net censors yet.

I completely forgot to give this story a perusing...but dude, see, now it's picked up like, well, insert whacky analogy there. I'm too tired to think on up right now.

But the interaction is great, kept natural, not forced. I dunno, I guess Fred's proofing got that tense thing in check, so keep the momentum moving.

Gotta jet
Lataz

It's a twist that a teacher knows about Gohan, and problems, but, oh well, twists are good. Pepsi twist on the other hand...
Kane 2003-10-14 . chapter 3
Perhaps your moving a tad fast with the story.
In the second lesson they are already going to see some ki. Normally I would think that they would wait a tad longer before going through that stuff. Otherwise pretty good. See ya,

Dragon Warrior Kane
Ookii Mamoru 2003-10-14 . chapter 3
The calculating, calm, and organized Chi-Chi is a nice touch. Chi-Chi has always been treated as such a shallow character. Its nice to see something can be done with her. I never believed it could be done. You have set a new standard with that character that I hope others will imitate. (Hint, Hint, to the other writers.)

I think you found a natural balance with Videl also. Most of what I’ve seen tends to go overboard also.

Keep up the great work.

OM
Nitte iz 2003-10-14 . chapter 1
Fascinating!
Optimus Magnus 2003-10-14 . chapter 3
Hmm, getting interesting I see
emilou 2003-10-13 . chapter 3
PLEASE,PLEASE,PLEASE(for my sanity as well as others) put the next chapter out soon!
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