I like this fanfic, but the writing is awkward and makes it a bit hard to read. I might not be all that good myself when it comes to grammar, but I am a native English speaker and would like to offer my services to help you write more naturally. I apologize if you find this to be insulting, but I see potential in your writing and would like to help bring that out.

plz update!!

This story is so cool. It's very mysterious and leaves you hanging. I love it! Please update soon.

you can always make up some random cards and effects for the dueling part here...LOL...u should update more! this is a kool story!

Poor Ryou. Have they actually explained the millenium items to the guys? Don't remember that happening. Keep going!

this is one kick ** story, infact i luv most of your stories.. continue soon please cuz i want hiei to doiscover yugi is his kid and everyone to find teh shock of there lives that teh fire demon has a kid... or in fact gave birth to one!

o.o Neat story! Please write more ^.^

wai, WAI! i like this story. especially pegasus's one eye glare.

hey I like this fic,I thought you had only posted it on mediaminer and now here it is... Kawaii it looks like Yami is teh dad and hiel the mother of Yugi... at least thats what I figure. I can't wait for more... keep going.
Ja ne

this is a good story but i wonder what Hiei and Yugi will say when learn their conected and what Ryou's dad will say when he sees Ryou and Kurama together... oh i have the feeling that their meetings wont end well.
can't wait for the next chapter till then take care
C.T

this is good

oh!! you should continue!! ^.^

Right This is really good!! Go Foxes they rock!

Wow this has potental. Keep it up.

Update! I love this so much! MORE-MORE-MORE!