I just wanted to drop a line and say that I really liked this story. You had a good range of characters, and I liked watching Roxie grow old, but I wished that Velma was still there with her. I am glad I found this.

Erin

Lovely, lovely work. I especially enjoyed how the writing itself felt infused with music and rhythm; it really lent the perfect atmosphere to this. And the subtitles really delineated each section very well and made the transitions smooth.

Oh, and the Roxie/Velma scenes were totally delicious, of course. :) Their dynamic was captured to a T, both in their dialogue and actions.

the last part was interesting, I wish it mentioned Velma though. actually the whole thing was interesting. I liked it.

omg that was AWESOME! keep it up!

Nice story. Very well written and I loved the true Chicago feel it had.

What happened to Vhelma in the end I wonder, and where did the grandkid come from? Do I hear a sequal?

Oh god. Can you say sexy? Clear, fluid, amazing writing, and gorgeous description. Utterly fantastic over all.

On behalf of the Triple C (Chicago chick clique), I would like to give this story the following rating: 2 thumbs WAY up!
Sincerely,
Rachael

I absolutely LOVE this, particularly the little headings! Great story, write more like it!
*Vivian*

Oh, lovely! Your descriptions of everything are so pretty--I get a real feeling of strong colours in the background for everything. And I love the line

...and she was up there, blinded by the limelight, deafened by the orchestra, sweat pouring down her back, and she'd stomp down and grind her hips and fall against Velma, back to back, moist skin on moist skin, moving, swirling, counting, in

perfect

unison.

because of the way it's set up--the new lines--and the sort of rythm it has. Also, it feels like the narration, especially at the start, is in a Chicago accent too. Loved it!

AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! Sorry...I just had to get that out of my system.

Wow. Just wow. Thats all I have to say.

WONDERFUL! I LOVE IT! PLEASE KEEP WRITING! YOU ARE A VERY TALENTED WRITER AND...WAIT...I SOUND LIKE A TEACHER! JUST KEEP WRITING!

Ive decided you have to be a professional writer. This fic is a work of art! I love it!! But you have to relocate this over to the Chicago story directory so other fans can more easily enjoy it. I actually found this by accident, but i'm so glad I did! Anyway GREAT JOB this fic officially knocks my socks off!

I absolutely loved this. It's so sweet. *shameless self-advertising* I have two Chicago fics up (under the name sweet775). Could you please R&R?

Wow..I just read this now although I realize you wrote that a while ago..Lemme just say, what a strong combination you've got going. Writing skills and a superb plot. I'm truly blown away. Its the kinda story that gives you chills at the end, good chills, like an Oscar-winning movie. ;) GOOD JOB and God bless you for writing one of the first and BEST Chicago fics!