beautiful...wel gross but wonderful...yeah...i'm sick...anyways loved it...nuff luv 4eva...
truly
fero-chan

...Wow.
I was totally shocked when I read this story. I didn't really take the sadism warning very seriously. You should write a multi-chapter angst/horror story sometime; I'd love to read it. With your talent you could be the next Stephen King.
Oh, and about your vivid anatomy-
You wouldn't happen to be in medical school, would you?

*sniffle*
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*sniff*
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"Wa..."*insert more wailing here."
That. was. WONDERFUL! I love you Chibizoo-sama!(not to be taken the wrong way *sweatdrop*
*Looks at dedication again* Oh, that's so sweet! Acknowledging that me and my kind exist and all.
Just know that, though there are only so many reviews out there, there are loads of people who love this and just can't get a chance to tell you. *points at people tied up in corner*
This is super
~crissy ^.~ *hearts*~

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That was good.

Not exactly the best writing, but, as you've said, it wasn't meant to be. ^^;

Gorey. ^_^ I like gore.

Gee, I'm not really good at constructive criticism. Sorry.

Oh... I was thinking...

"Dulce et Decorum est Pro Patria Mori"... Isn't that a line from a famous war-poem? I don't remember who wrote it, but I do remember projects on it hanging up in a Socials classroom. ^^;

My Yugi...he's evil...but he's still cool. Nice writing! Great job, great job.

I love the details you put into the bloody goodness!! I was reading it my right ear was hot and inchy, it was bleeding a little, but its good sign of a good fic!! Please con't!

*sigh* Apparently I never reviewed this, and now feel the need to do so after reading your one and only flame. I probably won't say anything particularly constructive, only comments designed to boost your self-esteem. *^^ [Still acceptable I hope! *grin*]

Your story, from what I gather, was not intended to be your greatest work of fiction on this site. You your self ask that people not write stories like it due to its generallity...apparently your flamer didn't pick up on that comment or has never read any of your other work for comparison.

To that end, sort of, this story is still fantastic in its own right, designed to illustrate a point or not. Your gore is disturbing and graphic and beautiful. Personally, I think that Jason and Freddy movies are distasteful, and tend to make me cry...*^^ However, writing such a gory scene, one that might have the same sort of effect on a person a Freddy or Jason movie might cause *points to self*, conveys an entirely different sense in a story. Your imagery is gorgeous, sadistic as that may sound. I don't generally think of a person's neck being severed and broken by hand as a pretty picture, but you manage to make it so somehow.

Hopefully you feel better about your story now, since I have heard bad reviews do not settle well on your ego. *^^ *hands Chibizoo a Yami no Bakura-samaPlushie [ ~o.0~ ] for yet another good story* Very snuggly for mourning over flames and wrath inflicting on said flame-ing reviewers.

My favorite part would most likely be the conclusion; you went from Egypt to present day, and placed down Pharaoh's thoughts. Very hard to believe that the Pharaoh would be capable of such killing; to Seto nonetheless, when he knows him now. Must be hard for Pharaoh to get any sleep after recieving a flashback such as that one. XD
-Overall grammar was near perfect so 9.5/10.
- Writing and basic description was fantastic so 10/10
- Uniquness, or overall story is a 9.5/10.
I have to say that I was really impressed with all the description and how accurate it was when Pharaoh was slicing Seto up. Majority of authors will put down something along the lines of Pharaoh just stabbing the High Presist, and naming all the organs and body parts he took off. You, however, beautifully (I sound like a sadist XD) wrote and described every little detail, all the blood, and parts, of the murder. Fantastic one-shot as usual, Chibizoo. ^ ^=

~*~ Spice ~*~

...; Mildly disturbing. But it was nicely written. This version of Yami as the Pharaoh was very original and quite admirable. Great job on it. It makes me wonder how Yuugi would act if he knew. And what of Seto?

This time I didn't just scan over this fic but seriously read over it... and somehow I burst out laughing at your description. O

What? I never reviewed this? I could have sworn...

No matter. It's still freakishly...erm...gory the second time around. @_@ How do you...?
I personally liked it. No, no, not the idea of getting your guts ripped out and all that, but the thought of the Pharaoh being different than we all think. Fits the nice-guy-who-really-isn't-so-nice kind of thing, you know?

Oh, and just a moment. To the Zarbon who reviewed before me, just a note. Telling the author that you wouldn't want to bear their children after reading this is a very unprofessional and odd way to end a critique. Not only that, on what you pointed out, memories /do/ shape a character's personality. It's the experiences of life that make a person what he or she is. Anyway. If you would look past the goriness, you might see something else. Maybe even besides the idea of the possibility that the Pharaoh was antagonistic. The contest /is/ on the premise that the main character is "evil."
I don't even know if you'll ever see this. But I'm not one to judge whether you can find something behind all this or not.

As for you, Zoo, keep plugging away. I like your uncanny style.

I honestly hope people don't submit stories like this to the contest. You can write, but this story doesn't particularly show off your capabilities. It's violence for the sake of being violent and not even well done violence. Violence that is handled correctly makes people go "whoa" because it evokes a strong emotional response. This is the kind of violence I get mass marketed to me when I go out to see Hannibal Lecter movies or any films from the Freddy or Jason series. From the way this fic was going, I almost expected Yami to start eating Kaiba's guts.

Speaking of which, I disagree with the way you've portrayed Yami. While I agree that Pharaohs were absolute rulers, what proof do you have that they did disembowlment or anything of the sort? And on what basis do you make Yami so out of character? It would be more convincing if you had character lead up to justify why Yami is so nice in the present. Saying he lost his memories just isn't going to cut it. So he loses his memories? But he doesn't lose his personality.

I'm disappointed by this fic and would not want to bear your children after reading it.

O_O

...O_O

*vomits*

Wow. Incredibly, incredibly disturbing. Especially Yugi's chipper 'we'll get your memories back for sure!' comment. Urgh. Amazing story, but... urgh.

This is so beautiful and descriptive. :hugs: See? A Zoo never loses her touch!

Now THAT made me hurl. Seriously, I ran right to the bathroom after reading it... arg, my stomach's still twisting.
I envy you. I envy you very, very much. And don't take my comment above the wrong way. I LIKE your fic, even if it effected me physically. I've watched almost every horror/gory movie around and none have effected me like that.
...Yes, I envy you for making me puke. Odd really.
Well, anyway, I love your work and always have. Perhaps, I'll even enter this new contest... the criteria is just so _fun_. **evil grin**

- Kai
(I still envy you. ^_~)