I agree with the others that this story needs to be fleshed out badly. More importantly, there needs to be a point. I haven't been able to find one. This just rambles aimlessly. Mary Sue is also running rampant here.

I'm afraid a complete re-write is the only thing that will save this story.

this was a good chapter. it could have been a little longer though. but please update soon.

Your story is good, so far. But it would turn out a lot better and be easier to follow if you added more to it. But keep up the good work, I like what you have so far.

This is a nice beginning. I think it needs to be fleshed out with some more background info about Nicole and a little more description, but still, a good first chapter, maybe? (Hint.):-)