(cont.)

and...too many new characters kills a fanfic...

well...i read first chapter...and this last one...

i guess it had good drama etc. but it is a bad dbz fanfic...

gohan/vegeta etc are too powerful, if your story is after cell...

for ex. gohan doesnt need to ask somebody to give something back...he is so fast, he can just take it...

and...to

i wonder why the saiyajin came to earth and will the z warriors be able to help him.

thanks for the link, can´t wait to start reading,

hei, it´s me again, could u tell me hoe the second part is called, cause i can´t seem to find it anywhere,

This was brilliant! When are u going to post part 2? I hope soon. It´s really awsome!I mean it!

I thought that the main characters of this fanfic is gohan and Videl, so why is gochi more of the main charcter?

Eichan, you are INCREDIBLE! *__*

I have spent the better parts of yesterday and today reacquaniting myself with your astounding story

ZOMG! that was so frikin awesome! but a cruel cliff hanger!>< you had better come out with part 2 soon! yes i am obviously one of the people who has read your story from beginning to end. i think that would great if you made a website for this story. it would definitely be on my favorites list and frequently visited too. If you make the website either email me or pm me to let me know k?^_^ keep writing!

omg i love you!! you updated!XD i love these few chapters they're pretty frickin good. o i think jinn and gochi might get together but who knows your the writter. ... man i'm so sad i've just posted this new story but nobody has reviewed me! could you please read and review for me? sorry if it takes your time but it is only one chapter and i'm really desperate just to get one review so i can know if i should continue on with the story or not. well keep it comin and update soon

Nice triple chapter update, ecchi-san.

omg! thats so awesome! well its one in the morning so i'll have to keep this short. loved the chapter. ja ne!

i really love this fanfic! i think jinn and gochi should get together. anyway sorry this is short but update soon.

NO! You didn't finish it! I rage! I fume! I roar! Please finish it... it was just starting to get 'special'... MORE!

Oh... Look, you make Gochi sound so sexy, but if Jinn is her pre-destined mate, could you make him sound worthy of her? Please and thankyou. More!