Hi! I really liked your story! someone had this on a list of favorites, so i clicked it, and i really like it! I think your so great that you came up with this uber cool idea, and then managed to float it. But why have you stopped? if you changed author names of something, you should post it. Can't wait to see what happens next! Is Daja gonna meet Uneni? Howya gonna do that? is years going to pass, cause in the books daja gets older, and still doesn't know, please continue its great.

i feel like i'm pestering you... but u said you were writing. So feel free to email me when you update. i'm getting tired of checking. or if you've stopped the story, you could email me that too. i'd apreciate it.

but anyway, i hope a bit of encouragement will really get you going again, and you really are a great writer! Would i keep bothering you if you weren't? It's a beautiful idea and you characters are real and rich and full of life. if you expand on this, then those character's will become something that people won't ever forget. But you have to work hard. uh... and if you aren't going to write anymore, please disregard the last paragraph.

i don't mean to be a pain, and if i am i'm sorry for it!

the shattered rainbow

Thankyou! thankyou for writing again and i hope to see it posted agian soon. I would have responded earlier but i haven't really been on lately...

and u guessed right, i'm a she :D

Have fun with you fic!

HAPPY WRITING

the shattered rainbow

hi, if anyone who ever reviewed this is still out there and willing to read it, im writing it again. and, blame shattered rainbow, its her (or his, but i assume its a her) fault. shes wonderful, she got me writing again. thanku!

HI! its me agian. This is a reminder, that if your're still alive, i would really like you to contunue this fic. you have alot of great ideas, and i would appreciate if you would share them. I know its almost been a year, but please! u said you would re-write chapter 3, but surely it doesn't take that long? I'm just reminding you, that people still try to read this. The longer you wait, the less it seems like we might still be here, but i am. So... please continue. I'm still checking, and i'm getting tired of disapointment. Thanx!

*luck*

HAPPY WRITING

the shattered rainbow

can you keep on writting please! It's really good

*COMMANDS YOU TO WRITE MORE!*

Oh, this was v. good, even though I have no idea who any of these people are and I only read it cos u told me too, you evil sticky person. Loved it though, it was v. cool, and can u please write more so that i can read it. And i like Magpie, she's way cooler than any of my 'original' (is that it?)people. And WHY can't i read chapter 3?
esteemed author: because I'm going to changechapter 3. I should take it down, coz its kinda big spoiler.

hey! i reviewed before, but that was a while ago. and you haven't updated yet! this story is so good, i can't wait for more. PLEASE update, i really want to know daja's reaction uneni. update update update! (just a helpful reminder)

yay! you updated! thats wonderful! i really like the 3rd chapter. Its really good. But the end of it, is fast. I wouldnt think that Niko would just tell magpie outright. I mean, if you look in the first book, he waited forever to tell sandry, brair, daja, and tris that they had magic.
So mebby slow it down a bit? If you want you can keep what you have written, but i would suggest makeing some minor changes. But then who i am i, you mignt have the whole thing mapped out already. wutev. keep up the good work!
the shattered rainbow

Wow. This is really good. I've never read anything from Uneni's point of view before. I think I like it alot:)
I was a little confused at the end of the third chapter. When you explained that Uneni AND Magpie have really powerful magic in just a few seconds, it was kind of too much. Maybe you should change it to a few paragraphs. It would be a lot less confusing.
You said you were looking for suggestions so... I think it would be really funny if Briar flipped out when he saw Magpie. It would be so funny!
Sorry, I tend to ramble on in reviews;) I'll stop now. I can't wait for more!

A very good introduction in your first chapter. And I like how you've portrayed the Thief Lord, kind of like the takameri in Street Magic. However, once you got to the third chapter, you seem to be getting a little sloppy. I am quite enjoying this story, however you might need to fix a few things. For example, spelling and punctuation. Niko's name is spelt 'Niklaren', not 'Nicklaren.'
When I say that your writing is getting sloppy, I mean that you're not seemingly writing it with as much care as I think you did in the first two chapters. You might want to rewrite this chapter and change it a little bit; introducing that the two main characters - who we haven't even gotten to know very well just yet - that both have powerful magic, and are going to see Daja, is a bit much all within 10 words. Other than that, this is going fairly well! Keep up the good work :)
Oh, and remember that if you do write about Daja - she is pretty level-headed, so keep her emotions in control when she realizes that her brother is alive. If she does go all-out blubbering (heh heh, emotional scenes are entertaining to write) don't get carried away. You have talent here; use it to its full extent! Good luck. Oh, and about February and the birth stone in the first chapter... at the end of the book Cold Fire (series: The Circle Opens) there are the months of Emelan. I'll give them to you here.
January: Wolf Moon
February: Storm Moon
March: Carp Moon
Sunborn (spring equinox)
April: Seed moon
May: Goose Moon
Wild Night
June: Rose Moon
Midsummer (summer solstice)
July: Mead Moon
August: Wort Moon
September: Barley Moon
Coldborn (autumn equinox)
October: Blood Moon
Dead's Night (Halloween)
November: Snow Moon
December: Hearth Moon
Longnight (winter solstice)
Days of the week:
Sunsday
Moonsday
Starsday
Earthsday
Airsday
Firesday
Watersday
Enjoy!

I'm sorry.

I must have deleted the email which you sent me with the new chapter. I swear I haven't got any emails from you in like forever.

I'm not doing a very good job as beta-reader then, am I? Delete it before I even get around to reading it.

I'm sorry. Again. Please forgive me.

Me again...

Great 2nd chapter, me tthinks that the Lord man person, should take an intrest in the fact that Uneni-whats-hi-name-guy has no "gang" and make him join theirs then he forces magpie to show him how to steal and... well steal... baisically... then they go on some action packed life-threatening journey to steal a lamp with a genie in it but they need two parts of a puzzle thing... wait a minute... thats aladdin... isn't it? ah well my idea has been stolen before i was even born... thats saying something... me gonna rite own fan-fic... Muhahahahahahaha

BE AFRAID...

Hugsies "Me van is an asylum for psycho paths"

Hello dear joint supreme ruler of chickens, Me likesies the 1st chapter very much *buk-kak* me watnts to read more... O there is a 2nd chapter...