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| Sabertooth Kitty 2003-09-25 ch 5,  | abuseFinally- I had time to read the whole thing! Excellent work! :) You have great character development here- Lori and Bagel fit in perfectly with the main cast, and I like your depiction of Miss Fifi as well. ;) Not only that, but despite living in the US, you have managed to get British "slang" (so to speak) down perfectly! You do a MUCH better Penfold than most other DM fanfic authors, including me! The villians, both Greenback and Cam Elion, were also very well portrayed. Their plans and motives really helped the story along, plus the idea of a female partner for Stiletto is a GREAT writing tool (I use the same tool, but with my own character... see New DM #4- "Feline Fatale"). Overall, this was a great story, and I can't wait to read the next installment! :) Later!! PS- a little shameless plug... be sure to check out MY other DM stories too. I'm only MORE than happy to hear from fellow DM fans. ;) Okay, that's enough- I'll leave YOU to your own devices... :) |