Reviews for Handed on a Silver Platter

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Lerris 2008-06-13 ch 18,	abuseThis was well done. Oh I saw a complaint or two in the reviews about Nabiki being reinvented, but then having characters change from their canon tendencies is fine as long as it is a compelling story and internally self consistent. Again, all in all a good story. The only thing significant that comes to mind was how much Ranma was hurt protecting Nabiki combined with the unlikelihood of Nabiki being attacked by random people off the street. I would have also expected Nabiki to have at least basic self defense skills given her upbringing and her mercenary nature, at least to the point of doing a little better than she did.
Hiryo 2008-01-07 ch 18,	abuseThanks heaps for writingn that wonderful story from the bottom of my heart!
moritynz 2007-11-25 ch 18,	abuseVery Good story. Damn glad you didnt make it a Ranma/Akane pairing, I cant stand Akane personally, her character has no real life to her, unlike Nabiki who is just a wealth of possibility. Thanks for the entertaining read. Mor
James Rennfield 2007-10-19 ch 18,	abuseI liked this story a lot. I found it very believable even with the development of Nabiki's feelings for Ranma. I would have to say that this is one of the best Ranma and Nabiki stories out there.
Asgeras 2007-07-14 ch 18,	abuseWow...nice story. I really liked what you did with a lot of the characters. The grammar did have some problems here and there, which you obviously know. ^^ I hope you're still around and writing. I'm sorry to hear about you Ranma/ SM xover not working out. Kind of funny how things can take on a life of their own, ne? Well, anyway, thanks again for the fic!
tony 2007-06-21 ch 18, anon.	abuseNice nabiki ranma fic nice sweet ending, wished you could have gone more in detail and have ranma ending up marrying all three tendo sisters, thats right all three ;)
ProphetWithAGun 2007-06-04 ch 18,	abuseThis was a nice, entertaining story. It's not the best story I've ever read, but it is on my favorites list. The biggest problem I had with it was a feeling of de javu I had while reading this story. The relationships progressed at a nice enough level, but occasionally it seems like a relationship is progressing and then seems to revert to its original form. It was a good story and you should feel good that you finished it.
Gangsta Spanksta 2007-02-18 ch 18,	abuseOverall, great story. :)
Gangsta Spanksta 2007-02-18 ch 12,	abuseGreat story so far. I doubt thought that Akane would call Ranma a 'pervert' when his mother asks about her son. That is a bit too fanon, IMO. Furthermore, the following is a mistake, "Akane attempted to be the voice of reason, but her voice creaked with fear for her sister's fiancee's life." At this point of the story, Akane is Ranma's fiance, not Nabiki or Kasumi, so the sentence is wrong. I know about Kasumi's little rational earlier in the story, but that is besides the point, if neither she or Nabiki have proclaimed Ranma as a fiance. Also, you the girl form of fiance by saying fiancee.
Gangsta Spanksta 2007-02-17 ch 5,	abuseGreat story. I always love Nabiki and Ranma matchups. You have great grammar and your punctuation is correct. This is far higher in that regard than the common fic on this site. You do have a problem with false reporting as the narrator; What I mean is that you call Ranma a 'he' when he is in his girl form. I know that generally writers that do this, do this because they feel that Ranma is still a guy mentally. But, you as an author should see yourself as an unbiased reporter, tell the audience what you see, not what you feel. Saying 'she' when Ranma is in his girl form, is no different than saying Ranma-chan, Onna-Ranma, Girl-type Ranma, or "Ranma in his girl form." Also, there is a more important reason not to use the wrong pronoun when Ranma is a girl, and that is it avoids confusion. That really isn't a problem, in your fic so far, since at this point you've only used Ranma-chan in your story sparingly. But, in a more complicated piece it can become very hard for the reader to know if Ranma is a girl or a guy at the time.
Eric13 2007-02-09 ch 5,	abuseI've always liked this story. The gradual changes that happen to the characters are nicely paced and believable. I love the interactions of Ranma and Nabiki. In re-reading this story, I was reminded of one of the biggest technical writing problems of this fic. That problem being that you use male pronouns for Ranma when he's in his female form. This is frankly wrong. It doesn't matter if Ranma thinks of himself as male all the time, you should still use female pronouns when Ranma is physically a female. Characters' thoughts can refer to Ranma as him/he/his, but descriptive narration should use the proper pronoun. The manga and anime could refer to Ranma as male all the time because they had pictures to show when Ranma was male or female, physically. However, you don't have that advantage; you only have words to draw the pictures in the readers minds. Basically, you can't draw the right pictures with the wrong words. This chapter has the best example of that. Throughout the entire 'photo-shot' you use male pronouns for Ranma. That means that the reader is either picturing Ranma as male the entire time, or has to constantly make mental corrections by changing the male pronouns to female in order to properly picture what's going on. That causes the reader to lose the flow of the narration due to constantly having to interrupt themselves to correct what they are picturing in their minds. It doesn't matter if you state that Ranma is in female form at the beginning, you have to constantly reinforce that with the proper pronouns. When you refer to Ranma as he/him, then that's what your readers are going to picture, a male Ranma even when you meant for Ranma to be in female form for the scene. Please, just use the proper pronouns so that we the readers can properly imagine the scene described.
neo82 2006-11-16 ch 8,	abuseawesome story - up to chapter 8 so far.
Fredryck 2006-08-18 ch 18,	abuseWow, good fic. It entertained me for a few hours; good job. :)
Ph34r Productions 2006-06-21 ch 1,	abuseThis was incredably good. I realise that this is a review for chapter 1, but really it's for all of them. I loved reading this, infact I started at about 6 p.m. and haven't stopped reading untill midnight; which is what time it is now. I loved how you did the Nabiki/Ranma relationship. A lot of the time writers, when matching Ranma up with another Tendo sister, will just be like 'Oh, she already loves him' and thats the story. But this wasn't one of them, and I just thought that I should point that out. You really are a great writer also, there were hardly any gramical errors that I saw reading through this, and your style is very captivating(if you didn't get that from the fact that I read this for 6 hours straight 8^). Well I suppose that this is the end of my long-winded review. Once again, I loved reading this. -p34r t3h cut3 on3s
alien2063 2006-05-14 ch 1,	abuseInteresting story - I rather liked it. :)

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