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| Marcie Gore 2005-07-16 ch 3,  | abuseTYical MAx! |
| Marcie Gore 2005-07-16 ch 2, | abusecome on max howcould you Deny a woman Who's just had two Heart surgeries! VERY sweet |
| Marcie Gore 2005-07-16 ch 1, | abuseVERY emotional stuff |
| KATi HEARTS EDWARD CULLEN 2005-07-15 ch 3, | abuseWondaful! I thought Sylvia was gonna die (that would have been a twist)! I'm glad she didn't she's funni. It was great! >>Fish |
| Cartgirl 2004-01-10 ch 3, | abuseWonderful story! Please write more Nanny stories! |
| pitaqueen 2003-11-02 ch 3, | abuseA little short but otherwise very productive for your pupose. I do have to wonder how far you are going to take this. Are you going to stop it here or continue? I vote for continue... hope you update soon. |
| Allison Lindsay 2003-11-01 ch 3, | abuseHey, there. Glad you took my advice. It made a very big difference. :o) In the very last line, you wrote: "and then it back later." I'm sure you meant, "and then take it back later." Lol. I like Chapter 3. Those are just the sort of things Maxwell would say. I do feel that the chapter could have been a bit longer. After reading the last line, I was left wanting more, like maybe Fran's reaction to his final statement. Perhaps they could have another "moment," though it doesn't have to be physical, like the kiss. Well, anyways, at the risk of rambling on, lol, I'll end my review with a compliment: You're an excellent writer. :o) |
| Allison Lindsay 2003-10-31 ch 2, | abuseGreat chapter. Good job with your characterizations. This story is very well-written. Two, things, though: Characters' thoughts should be in single quoation marks, and, like I said in my first review, only ONE speaker in a paragraph. In other words, when a character has finished speaking, hit the return button twice before typing another character's reply. The story really will be easier to read if you do that, trust me. :o) |
| Amanda 2003-10-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseI like this story. You have to continue it! |
| Amanda 2003-10-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseI like this story. You have to continue it! |
| StuntChini 2003-10-17 ch 1, | abuseOh...cliffy! Now I have to see what happens. Please continue! |
| pitaqueen 2003-10-09 ch 1, | abuseThis was a very good start for your fan fic. I can't wait to see where you take this. You have a lot of paths you could take. Please Update soon. |
| Allison Lindsay 2003-10-07 ch 1, | abuseThis is a very nice start. Well-written and in-character. One suggestion, though. There should only be one speaker in a given paragraph. That makes the story easier to read. Other than that, keep up the good work. Hope you update soon. :o) |
| Rachel 2003-10-05 ch 1, anon. | abuseI like it so far! Great start and I want to read more soon! |