Great job. Catch ya on the flip side.

I missed this story when you first wrote it. Anyway it was...i think your best story. You captured their feelings very well!

aw! thats so sad! its really good, but its really sad! good job though! :D :D :D

Just a smidgen to much of clichéd primordial angst. Try to add more value to feelings of misery, so as to avoid siphoning characters of personality.

Very good and accurate character sketching!