To quote another reviewer--a strumpet is a **. It is not a flattering term. It is not something you would call someone you admire.
Work on characterization. Please. Read your dialogue out loud and see if it sounds like the way anyone, let alone Jack Sparrow, would speak.

Elle, I read the story and you haven't update in over two years! I know it's been a while, but can you please update? I love WillOCs and JackOCs if they come in pairs, but primarily WillOCs. You have a wonderful writing style and I cannot wait to read more of 'For All Time' Again, please update!

Your friend,

W.M.

Cool story ashame that the scarlet morrow was reduced to splinters it had a cool name shares my last name (morrow) :-) great story so far, going to read on now!

This one was great too! You're a gifted writer and my gift from Heaven!
Love and kisses,
Otacon

1. A strumpet is a **. And Swashbuckling is not a noun. That is extremely unclever, unless, of course, Ariel is a **, which I haven't a doubt.
2. KILL THE MARY SUE
3. kill the dialect while you're at it
4. This is an awful story. For the love of God/Allah/Incan monkey gods, *stop*

My dear sister,
Your imagination has really done it this time. Brilliance. That's all I have to say. This story has proven how great your talent really is. Please update soon, even though I may have read the following part when I was urging you to write more on the way to Christmas Trees. Keep Jack in line for me.
With sisterly love
Lizzie

YAY! JACK!
KEEP GOING! You're doing awesome!

great story! hope u update soon. i like ur OC! ~*brie*~

This was very good i have not read such a great story is a very long time. Thank you for writing it!!

Hi! It's Emily S. and your dear sweet twin! *Emi smacks Ms. HellFireWitch* Hehehe. It's great! I'm so happy you've finally posted it! I love it. Really. We are so thrilled to see it. This is Emi's new pen name, and she will be posting some Charmed stories! She just doesn't know that yet. ;) Well we must go exploring the great beyond (the internet). My new room is being painted Caribbean blue! I know, I know, I have no life. :) TTFN
CentellearSirene(Glistening Mermaid) and Turner'sCorset

very, very, VERY good opening! I am totally intrigued now, (especially about the 'lustful daughter!lol) so you have to update SOON!

Just a question: she had a vision that her ship went down and her crew died, right? So why didn't she do anything to stop it? Was she not able to...? I was just wondering! :)