Absolutely Wonderful!!
As magnificient as a swansong itself!

*bows down* Very touching indeed and beautiful choice of words. You make the phrases flow so smoothly you barely realize that you've already read through the story...your writing makes the mind, the heart & the soul hunger for more fanfics like this! Keep it up!

Kenren T.

absolutely lovely, UltraM, you have a way with words. Quite a lot from one small scene in both the manga and the anime. ^_^ Like me, you tend ot stuff a lot into a few words...keep it up. I look foward to more!

Wow, your reparagraphed version is rather... too chopped up. But you can't please everybody ^^.

This is one of those quiet fics that holds much meaning and silent emotions through the use of beautiful language. I love it.

Wah.. that was beautiful... I got confused at first but in the middle of it, you really start to realize who's who.

Some points to consider though, I *think* the paragraphs were too lengthy. Maybe you could chop them up a bit, just to give space to things that need emphasis , no?

Well, another great work! Congrats!

O.O That was so... massively... beautiful. I loved it. The wordplay... the meaning... the bird... it was gorgeous. Absolutely stunning; the kind of written beauty that doesn't just holds the reader in awe, the kind that makes their breath hitch from the sheer emotion pouring forth. It was... awesome. Wow.

Wonderful vocabulary. Fantastic idea. Simply beautiful.