Yuck, yuck, yuck.

ENOUGH SAID

This fic... is not that great. Your characters are Sues, and that's bad. *nods*

Horrendous. I did LOVE this part, though:

"One grabbed Shi's knife and rammed it into the back of Shi's knee. "Yes, really." He said mercilessly.

Shi screamed out loud and tears ran down her face."

Too bad **, I mean Shi didn't die, though. :(

Hello there person who was too afraid to leave a real email address ^_^

Screw you

Hm. It seems in every "fic" you have, you are the main character. How ... amusing. And you even brought in ANOTHER mary sue, wow. I am impressed. Two mary sues, all the more to taint and boink the unwilling characters. Your parents must be thrilled.
I think you are right though. Kit is the "Two". As in ... **. Kit is **. As are you! I suppose Shi would be the anus of which you are currently clinging onto. So you're one of those cling-on ** that never go away. You leave unwanted stains in everyones life that is hard to remove, even with bleach. So as you happily live your life, stuck to someone's **, just realize that soon the person will get the sense to shake you off. You are nothing more than dirt, which needs to be washed away with the flowing tide of tears of laughter. Your "fics" are nothing more than something to poke fun at, as they prove you have the IQ of ** cheese. Rotten ... crusted ... ** cheese. That has been in the dark places for far too long and has grown hair itself; I think you know what I mean, go wash your ** **. Wipe the glazed donut look off your face. Carpet muncher.
You will always and forever be The Two: The Sloppy Seconds. Pushed aside, never given a second look for fear of going blind, as people run by you gagging and holding their noses. You will die a lesbian virgin as I forsee in your future. If you were ever IN the Matrix, you'd be the first one killed. You would be too distracted in battle by the wang of which you will never have, and you have to settle for sucking crusty old men's shriveled up ** for five cents, like the cheap ** you are. You long for a lover but no body will EVER take you for you are stupid, and lack the ... reality needed for a real life. You are demented, deformed, and so obviously ** gay.
I turn you now over to another, who would like for their opinion to be known.
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I feel the person who got dragged into your fic. Does she know you are gay? your friends are flamingly gay? and that you sit ALL day and night thinnking of ways to merely ** every character in ever fic.
How is it that your mind can not come up with an original character? Is it that ** infantile? MUST you be in every ** fic your write? Dear God I have to cleanse my mind everytime I read one * and yes I have read them when I felt the urge to kill myself* for the simple fact it shows me that there is someone out there more pathetic than the lowest form of man. That would be you. I know your brain can not comprehend all this information at one time.
Your fics are a ** joke. Your life is so obviously filled with gay **, muffing you at random. STOP ** looking at me with the galze on yoru lips. It is simply killing me. SLOWLY kiling me * you know what I mean the way your brain cells have been slowly dying since your birth.
WHEW okay now I shall point out your faults
1. You are gay if not you need to be gay at some point for no man will have you.
2. Your fics suck not just this one but each and everyone.
3. The idea of your character in every fic should tell you that you are unstable and need to seek professional help. ahem*padded room*
4. Please tell me you are dead now
5. Damn are you still alive I would kill myself if I were you. Hurry run there is still time.
6. Please go grow up and then join the real world. I know you are 19 SUPPOSEDLY. SO that tells me some things.
7. 19 and still thinking mary sue thoughts you so need to get laid.
8. Sorry but I do not see this happening as you call yourself the two and he laughs in your mother ** face
9. Please do not reproduce ever, society can not take another copy of you. You have tainted the gene pool enough.
10. FINALLY did I not specify that you should die?
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We leave you now with these thoughts and ideas. Please use one or all of them, the main one being "DIE ** DIE". Here are a few suggestions as we sign off:
1: Knife. Take knife, slit wrists, slit throat. Die.
2: Jump from something very high onto something very hard. A building/plane/bridge onto concrete will do nicely. Your brain matter would make a good rainbow effect on the sidewalk. Oh wait, I forgot, you have no brain ... oh well the ** cheese would draw rats away from every city in the world to there though.
3: Gun. ** gun and click. Point it in your mouth or at your temple. People nearby will hear a "BANG" followed by a hollow thud. We will rejoice.
4: Pills. Since you do nothing else really you can just take lots of pills, and be sure not to hurl them back up. We will laugh as you pass out and die.
So, take some of these suggestions to heart. If you need advice or help, please find us as we are really good and considerate people and would love to help you in any way we can; we have a large array of weaponry and blunt objects to use on you. It would be a fun time for all. (But BYOC [Bring Your Own Casket])
Thank you, and have a NICE DAY.
Sincerely,
Each And Every Body Who Have Read This Fic and Have At Least 5 IQ Points

Hey Amy this is so SO great, I can't believe you aren't a professional writer. Keep up the good work, I know you will. Can't wait to read new stuff. Pus x

instead of writing ** stories about urself, why dont u just pretend ur the main character as your writing?

...Okay...and what was everyone else in the chatroom doing?? LOL, that was great Kit, actions and blood! Weehe! The Skittle is pleased ^_^, sure makes up for the fluff i wrote, lol, keep em coming...just...try not to scare off the rest of the chatrooms.

i like it...but just maybe a little too much fighting stuff for me

its good tho!

lyl~laure

Hey Kit! Well ya kept me waiting long enough to read it! lol! I like!

Promise mine's on its way! :D

Wowzers, that's some serious animosity between Kit and Shi. Glad that the Twins came back to help Kit...good stuff!

Col... It's so descriptive. I could see everything really really clearly. It also proceeds in a logical fashion, without weird gaps. Good job. It's not many people can write good action scenes... Way to add Linkin Park! I kept changing the song to match the story... Anyway, great fic!

that was one really long fight scene. i mean... damn... how many pages is that? *shakes head* you really were bored. (and we--i played those songs... cuz i had them and i'm weird that way.) yeah... good fight tho. albeit confusing at points but still very good.