I love the whole carousel thing you've done here. You've really captured Lucian's voice, I think. Very haunting and well done.

I enjoyed all over your Underworld stories a great deal, but this one was utterly fantastic! I loved watching him pity Michael and hate Selene, and then being able to see his own story playing out all over again in these two different people and doing everything in his power to save them.

Wonderful!

That was lovely. I saw the movie again this weekend and am totally smitten with Lucian. And this was absolutely lovely.

Very intense...I loved the whole 'carousel' angle, it reminded me of the song with the same name by Linkin Park, which set the perfect mood while I read it. Lucian's insights were awesome - I loved those scenes in the movie when he was slowly starting to figure out that Michael loved Selene like he loved Sonja. A few grammar errors, but an amazing job, all around.

-Karys

dude... O_O powerful stuff, this. nice work

One of my favorite parts of watching "Underworld" was watching the wheels turn in Lucian's head as he figured out what was what between Michael and Selene -- overestimated, if you ask me, but what the crud.

Shades of Shatner, you even replicated Lucian's pauses.

Some of the words are a off. Lucain saying "mate" instead of "bride," only bugs me a little, but Sonja was "burned alive," not "buried alive." Little things like this can take me out of the moment.

"in a war that even sometimes failed to understand." Typo here. It's all fun and games until someone loses an "I."

"they were blood thirty fiends" I think you mean, "bloodthirsty."

This is a wonderful treatment of one of the most rivting movie sequences I've seen. I find that you do it great justice, and I love the things you've added.

oh, goosebumps.

INTENSE!! Very haunting! I love the way you've depicted Lucian's emotions perfectly and powerfully! This fic's no doubt going on my favs list.

I truly hope that you change you mind-- your Underworld fic is truly magnificent. Please continue writing...

Wow. this is amazing. I've read almost all the other one post stories you have writen and they are amazing. You write beautifully with a very professional flow and style, it sucks you right in. I just had to comment, your an excellent writer. I look forward to seeing more stories if they come. Good luck!

Awesome. Really beautiful.

Excellent fic. I sincerely enjoyed reading it. It had a lot of passion in every word. I also loved the style in which you wrote this. Nicely done. Hope you write more soon! :)

Brilliant - staggeringly brilliant. I admit I didn't enjoy any of the plot or characters in Underworld... except Lucian, a creature so exquisite I've never dared hope I'd see him properly portrayed in a fic. Yet, here you are.

Not only have you nailed the man's (wolf's?) style, speech pattern and attitude, you've cut to the very core of everything that makes his character and the movie worthwhile. Steady and percise, calculated yet full of passion, an understanding so profound it transcends the original, shedding layers of cliches, bad dialogue and plot holes into the heart of the matter. Selene and Michael, Lucian and Sonja, I've seen it, but I never truly understood it till now.

Simply magnificent. I do adore the style, too. Exactly Lucian, clipped, direct, yet with a deeper pain beneath the surface... and the approach to it, so simple. No need for any complex literary devices. Just the monologue, and it's everything.

Wonderful.

I think I must read your other stories now. Oh, and if you ever want more Vampires and Werewolves in this style, allow me to note the World of Darkness gaming universe as the place for you - I'd dearly love to see you play in it.

Thank you for this masterpiece.

Great work per usual. It was sad to see your live journal go. At least you left us some goodies. Thanks!

This was amazing, you did a great job. I love these Lucian fics. Hope to read more from you in the future.