Lovely...I really enjoyed this story. I find it very interesting how you kept Sydney true to her personality on the show, yet added your own
touch to it. I love how you had the "Do you know where my father is?" comment in the beginning and the end. It is very much like Sydney to start a normal conversation, then explode and yell and someone, then go back to what she was saying before. Like it just slipped out of the mouth unexpectedly. Anyway, the story is amazing, as is your writing. Keep it up.

Nevaeh

great start! pls continue...

Ah! Go Syd!! he completely deserves it! I know that was a one shot fic, but i think it has the potential to be a great story!! keep up the great work on AL your stories, they're my favorites!

While I was reading this, I completely forgot that I was reading a story, not the script from an actual episode! Awesome job at capturing their emotions and personalities! You should so write for the show for real :)

Amazing story. I'm hooked. Please write more. I'm going to check out anything else you've written if you've written anything else! Keep up the good work.

Wonderfully written. I think you just set up a good base for a good story.

It's beautiful! I love it so much although the angst it just overwhelming.

I just wanted to let you know that I nominated this story for BEST ANGST at allalias.com


Jen
a.k.a. spinach

That was good, as usual, keep up the good stuff! lots of love for ya, Kris

this is going to be a very interesting story. i cant wait to see happens. i just hope syd and michael end up together here. keep it up! t/c

i loved that! so great, as always! keep it up. ~Christina

Lovely fic. A lot of those things need to be said.

Perfect. This is exactly how I would expect it to go.

I don't think that its a good sign for me, a reader, when you didn't write your "more?" comment at the end. :-( I LOVED this! I really wish you would continue it! so, I've got a favorite line of the whole story. It just jumped right out at me. :-)

"I don't need you to be anywhere for me."

Dude, that just rocked. hahaha. And the repeated question of "do you know where my father is?" (ha, that was great! I LOVE Jack!) Jenn, this whole thing just kicked MAJOR butt. YOU kick major butt.

This is sounding really interesting so far. I hope you keep on writing. Well done!

OMG that is one of the best begin to any story that i have read in a long time please keep updating it for me