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| Jtails 2004-02-27 ch 4,  | abuseMe likes Delliham's lil sis ^_^. Yay I know it's you. Me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes me likes. ^_^ read my story and tell me it's crap. ^_^ Jtails |
| Hallie Kirsten 2003-12-16 ch 4, | abuseI liked this chapter, too. The only thing is, the correct spelling is Goa'uld. |
| Hallie Kirsten 2003-12-16 ch 3, | abuseI'm back. Sorry it took me a while to review. I've been enjoying this story and I just read chapter three. Another good one and now I'm off the reading the next! |
| Hallie Kirsten 2003-11-24 ch 2, | abuseWell, finished reading chapter 2. I never expected the storm to be a Gou'ald ship. I like how you wrote that into the story. Now I'm really interested to know what happens next. |
| Hallie Kirsten 2003-11-24 ch 1, | abuseI like this story so far. Yes, the format needs work but excuse me *Lady of Nimrodel* it doesn't mean you should flame a writer's story. What you said is terrible and there should be something done about flamers on this site. Delliham, keep up the good work. I'm sure you'll improve the format and I'm off to reading the next chapter :-) |
| david 2003-11-24 ch 1, anon. | abusegood storys adele ceep up the good work and ill ceep reading your storys. form david |
| Cathy 2003-11-24 ch 2, anon. | abuseAn interesting part, you have me wanting to know what is going on. A Gau'uld mother ship arrives and they call it a storm, that is an interesting turn of events. I hope you post another part soon. |
| Lady of Nimrodel 2003-11-19 ch 1, | abuseYour story was crap, crap, crap. DESTROY!! PS: It was crap. Not really, maybe, perhaps. (from delliham who is sitting right behind her) I can write better hate mail to myself than you guys...YOU SUCK! |
| SistaHavanaBrown 2003-11-04 ch 1, | abuseHi there, you've established a plot in this story and that's an important start. If you don't mind my help, I just want to give you some constructive tips about your format. When you write dialog, it should be separated from narrative (paragraphs). Ex: "Greetings O'Neill," Teal'c said with a slight bow of his head "So, what's up T?" Jack responded once again very cheerfully. See the difference? It'd also easy to read. I would like to know where the team is headed off to. Planning on writing another chapter? Hope so! |