Wow. This was an awesome story! nd the way you had hakkai not accoustomed to having claws and such was good.

An entertaining read.

I love Gojyo, so I was pleased that he got some 'screen' time.

Good OCs too. No Mary Sues.

Barbara

Good job. I loved your story. Hakkai is one of my all time favorite characters. I appreciate this story and I hope mine does just as good.

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its complete like you promised!!
i absolutely adore the way you write and portray the feelings and emotions and happenings perfectly like it was actually part of the book.
ending with the part about the setting sun was just simply perfect. excellent work on this.

kitematsu

Nice. I really like where you took Hakkai in this. You brought him to a place beyond where he is 'now' but without it feeling fake or false. Very fun reading!

Please post up a new chap and conclude this coz I'm DYING to find out!

Update! Oh, goodie!

I love the grim intensity of this chapter, with action and emotion tightly wound together in a riveting panorama, until finally, things ease off towards the end and the reader can take a much-needed breath. And, after my less-than-positive comments on the action sequence in the first chapter, I just have to say - this chapter rocks! As I mentioned above, this chapter is balanced just perfectly, so that we never have "too much" action at any given time, and it's all easy to visualize and digest.

I think my favourite part is when Sanzo opens his hand to reveal the limiter. That was priceless, and in fact, I adore Sanzo throughout this chapter, with his wondeful economy of words and no-nonsense attitude, you've truly done him justice. Hm, I'm guessing he and little Jeep together made short work of locating and retreiving the limiter. Just one more way in which you delightfully manage to include the dragon in the plot - a small, but itegral, part.

And! Oh my goodness, we have met a SMART crazed youkai! The gray-haired leader actually tried to escape! Lovely! I don't know why that amuses me so much, and maybe it shouldn't, but hey, I thought it was cool.

I also like the way that you've kept in mind (and in character!) just how STRONG Goku and Gojyo are. You haven't downplayed that strength to give your OCs the upperhand, which means of course, it just makes the fic that much more believable, because really, Minekura's boys are freaking POWERFUL, and woe to anyone who stands in their way.

And Sanzo! As far as I'm concerned, he stole the show in this chapter, and I think that's just fine and dandy. Because no matter how much the others contribute to the plot, Sanzo is Sanzo. And you really gave him his chance to shine. ^_^

Which means, of course, that I loved the interaction between Sanzo and Wei. I can see an exchange like that happening, with Sanzo pretty much telling him to "get up and deal with it, no wallowing in the angst".

I love this line:

"Her gaze traveled past the shocked figures of the other mine youkai and Wei, past her own father, past Gojyo and Goku, to settle on the spot where Sanzo now climbing rather clumsily onto the top of an adjacent rock, his robes hitched up around his knees."

I like the little reminder there of Sanzo's humanity. It just tickles my fancy.

So, I'm guessing now that perhaps Hakkai will have a chance to make amends for negative feelings, as well as give his thanks, by healing Hari? Although he may not be strong enough for that...

And it's going to be a bittersweet ending, of course, with the Sanzo-ikkou hitting the road yet again in the wake of tragedy.

One more chapter! I say bring it on, V!

yay! update! -dances about-
good good twists to the story. glad the sanzo-ikkou dint get the limiter that easily XDD
WOTS
excited to see the next chapter.

GAMBATEH!! UPDATE SOON XD

~kitematsu

Pleease update again soon - I've been following this stroy for quite a while, and it's on my fav.s list! ^_^ Please - I can't wait to see Hakkai get his limiter back!

that was a good climax, i look forward to the ending!

Oh. Oh. Oh.

I've been waiting for this for a long time. Wow. The action was breathtaking. I love a couple turns of phrases: "He bounded over the boulders to join the fight, acting for all the world like some sort of mountain goat on speed." That is certainly our Goku! And: "...each time he (Gojyo) thought of trying to finish the journey one person short of a full Jeep," because the read on that can be simultaneously poignant as well as humorous.

Also, what a clever and logical solution for the finding of the limiter after the Bad Guy pitched it - you had me worried there. (Go Sanzo!) But oh, the heartache of Hari finally succumbing to the Minus Wave.

Cannot wait to see the conclusion.

I love this story. At first, when I began reading it, I hadn't read the seventh volume of Reload, so many of the details were lost on me. I first thought: Why did Hakkai have two different eyes? Then I realized, oh, that's right. One's a fake eye. It was a bunch of little things like that.

Do you think you'll be able to include the vine power thing that he did in volume 7? That had to be the most kick ** fight I had ever read in Saiyuki...

If it's not too much trouble, could you check out my Saiyuki stories? Two are drabbles (I hear they are quite good, but I'm a severe critic of myself), but one (which I have been working on for a while) is an actual chapter story. Once I finish it, there will more than likely be a sequel. And leave a review on one of them, if you don't mind.

Ooh, Sanzo-sama takes charge. *grin*

I have to admit, that I had a hard time getting through chapter one. I found the abrubt, heavy action scenes a little hard to follow, and it didn't immediately pull my interest into the story. BUT... having already read a few of your one-shot pieces, and having enjoyed them, I was excited about giving your multi-chapter fic a chance.

I'm glad I did.

Suspenseful and intriguing, with interesting OCs who keep us guessing, a delightfully IC Sanzo-ikkou, and a plot that keeps the pages turning, it's certainly more than a rewarding read that left me grinning at the end of chapter 9.

"Hakkai spends some quality time getting to know the youkai within."

Hm, from this description, I was expecting something different, something more typical, perhaps. But I was pleasantly surprised at the originality of your tale. And I have to commend you on managing to interweave your OCs into the tale so effectively, so as to add to the story without taking the focus off of our boys.

There was something that gave me pause for thought, though it's a minor detail:

The winged-clan were under the impression that Hakkai was newly turned? Does this mean that they think he's been in the area for a while, deliberately taking out the mad winged-youkai? Were would he have acquired the limiters if he had only recently changed?

The story makes me wonder about the Minus Wave and its effect, and about Hakkai (and Goku's) resistance to these effects. Seems Hakkai was quite vulnerable to the Wave almost immediately after removing his limiters. Is it only those tiny little limiters that keep Hakkai from going completely berserk at any given moment? Very scary thought, that!

I love the way your plot keeps taking new twists, even as it takes a keen look at the inner workings of the characters, most notably Hakkai and Gojyo. Sanzo and Goku, though seen primarily through Gojyo and Hakkai's eyes, also sparkle through your satisfying portrayal.

Which of course, brings us to character dynamics! Saiyuki wouldn't be the series we know and love without that added spark, and you've captured it well without making it a heavy focus of the story, choosing instead to focus on the plot and individual characterization. That in itself, in a world full of stories which focus primarily on the relationships between characters, can make for a unique read.

Your Gojyo is perceptive, your Sanzo glints with his own brand of sharp, decisive charisma, while Hakkai is reflective without being overly angsty, and Goku (though I wouldn't complain if he had more of a part!) radiates with the energy and sincerity that we all expect from our favourite monkey. And you haven't forgottem Jeep! His appearances are charming and adorable throughout the chapters.

Well, I've written you a novel! *grin* Suffice it to say that I enjoyed your story, and look forward to the concluding chapters.

yay!! looking forward to some action and it's about time they got out of that cave (three of them anyway) sorry, took so long to review! i've been busy and my pile of stories to read is huge! okay, looking forward to more!

This is an incredibly good story. I urge you to continue. It's unbelievably well written and it is from the manga, I think. Keep going as best as you can.