|Reviews for Warriors and Warrioress|
| Susan M. M 9/4/09 . chapter 1
First, go to the library or the nearest used bookstore. Get a copy of Strunk and White's Elements of Style and a dictionary. EVERY would-be writer should own both. Next, correct the punctuation and the spelling. If the readers are too distracted by grammatical, punctuation, spelling errors, etc., then they can't concentrate on your story.
A little more description would help. I can't "see" Camarand when I read this; I can't visualize the setting at all.
Which king are they going to meet? It might be a nice twist if they were summoned by the Blackpools, instead of by Baaldorf.
| Newkirks Bride 11/19/03 . chapter 1
I think the first part of ti is very slow. But it was a great start. I think you should add Dirk Blackpool and Erik Greystone in there to give the story more flair other then that great story.