I actually did like this, your powers of description are exquisite. This isn't as good as your other pieces, but still quite a gallant offering. Putting Fujin there... wow. That's a character that doesn't get much facetime -- thank you for paying attention to her!

Yes. Well.

I liked it! nice little slice of thing going on, the use of present-tense is unusual enough to seta mood of somehting /displaced/ something /strange/... a lot of the juxtapositions, with Fujin's good eye versus Ultimecia's, with Fujin and the wind, are quite good.

Technically, I think the only real problem I'm feeling with this fic is that the writing, at times, seems too laid-back, too casual for what's going on--phrasing such as [like instead of] and [perhaps even] contribute to this effect. But that's more a matter of personal preference, and there's certainly nothing wrong with a casual narrator if it's intended--it's an interesting contrast between tone and content, maybe a bit distracting, but certainly not inherently incorrect.

wow this was really sutpid u have no talent nd i didtn liek this it made no sens cuz id didnt get it...it thoght it wuz about fuujin but then fuujin turnd into ultemcia? u shud write fic with more siefer that iz another ting why isnt there any siefer it wood be coolr if it wer a romanc. i bet u dont care thet its like not orignal at all if you wanted to write it relly original u could have has it be like aa romanse wiht fuujin and ultemcia...that woud be h0tt...lol the it could be liek lesbians...

neway it waz 2 short u shold make itt longer and u nned 2 work on teh endign... it should have like dennimwa nd i htink it wud be bettr if u made it more liek about fuujin, it could be like a billdungzromun and hav all htis medafizikul hstuff goign on and be reel deep intop like what it means4 fuujin to be ultemcia and u idnt do shti witht he htemes you atempded 2 weve wiht the imagry nd the wind and voicrs and eyez so i htink you should do it more in a gorge eliot fazhun r mebbe liek uzing popular pradimes passed down from peple like wlliam falknur... he was crazy hsit LOLoLOLOLOl...so newayz, Write More, and make sure to have more siefer...o yeah and donf 4get teh lasbians!1!1!1!!1!!

o and by hte way i lurves u long time!1! chow!1!!1!one!

- HighSchool Fanpoodle From Hell

That was defintely interesting, if not a bit short (sorry, I'm not much of a fan of short fics) but it was very good and original.

Okay I'm stupid, but is this a Fujin=Ultimecia beacause if so that is definitely a concept I haven't seen before!:)

Amazing. Your style of writing really blew me away; enigmatic, mystical, and powerful. I'm not too sure as to what happened; all I know is that it has to do with Fujin and Ultimecia and time compression. The last line is...wonderful. No idea what it means, but dammit, it just sounds good! Great job.