Very nice, so far. I like your OCs, haha. Will definitely read your rewrite.

wow i cant believe you made Artemis GAY! That is so stupid... what kind of preverted ** hole are you?? What, are you gay too so you had to make someone else who was gay so you could feel better about yourself!?!? Maybe after this you will think twice before makeing one of so many peoples favorite chactors gay. Then again since you are a gay preverted ** then you probably wont and you will go on makeing your preverted chactors, makeing everyone mad at you! I hope your friends dont know your gay(if you have any that is) Well... hope to read some of your more tasteful stories in the future. See ya **! bibi..

It was good, but not the kind of thing I like to read. No offence. But you're a good writer, I can't deny that.

I wondered what happened to you!!

I'll have to hurry up and read the next chapter {that you said in Authors note 2}

Your fellow writer and royal lunatic,
Identity99

I think you should go with option three! Re-write the story to have a better plot but have Artemis and Saias' relaionship grow more gradually. I think that is the best option... Artemis is a little slutty to sleep with Saia on their first date... LOL I'm just kidding^_^
I really like the plot-line so I'm looking forward to see how the heck you can make it better! I feel that is the only way you can let loose on your artistic abilities! Do what you think is best and we'll be happy :)
I look forward to whatever you'll choose and post this on too! There might be someone who would like to answer this too!
Ja Ne TrunkZy the Mighty
PS. I thought you had posted a new chapter! *pout* Please hurry up, cuz this story is unbelievably fabulous!

Hehehe can i just tell you how many times ive read your story over and over again?..its just..so cool! i love saia..hes like so dark.
Hehehe...I've updated my story, now you gotta update yours!!

Personally I think you should go with option 4: rewrite story with same plot but have Artemis and saia's relationship grow more steadily.
Btw..it's very good!! I love yaoi!
Have you guys read my story? Artemis/Alex Rider crossover...lot's of yaoi!! First couple of chapters kinda boring though to set the scene. (Yes, yes, I have no shame in promoting my stuff).
Anyway...loving your story!!

I like option three, because I think, as a talented writer, it would be your best option (btw, I'm calling YOU the talented writer, not myself) And I like plots ^_^ And a gradual relationship makes everything even more yummy when they get to the good part! YAY! SEE YA
-Deity

Re-write the story to have a better plot but keep Artemis’s and Saia’s relationship fast moving like it is in this version.
or just keep it the way it is, eithers good. I love your fic by the way keep up the good work.

This story is good, but it's plagued with the same problem as many Artemis romances...too quick. Much too quick. Artemis is not impetuous in the least; neither is he susceptible to good looks. The only person I can possibly think of him being paired with is Butler, simply because he's had all his life to analyze the man. When approaching a romance involving Artemis, make sure to pace yourself, for God's sake...because I doubt you'll be able to justify his decision to suddenly let his guard down completely and make mad, passionate love to a pretty stranger.

yo... u sed slash. ther wuz none so u could make this a PG-13. if u wanted lol it was good.

an excellent fic I do hope you'll update it soon

No keep Artys name Artemis! PLEASE! This story is odd, but that's good! It MEAN'S that it's not a carbon copy of a story that has been done too many time's! WELL DONE! I wanna see what happen's! YAY YOU ROCK!

You wrote it when you were ten? You realise that what you wrote declares you have broken the terms of the FanFiction.net guidelines? You're phucked up if you're admitting that.

haha chapter 1 made quite a large bulge in my pants, thanks, i needed that ; )