I realised that I have read this fic a few times and never reviwed it, so here I am. You were right when you said it was wierd, but I think it really works. The repeated sentances emphasise the point and the sentances which are gradually completed work like thoughts. It's a wonderful fic for them dealing with the others passing in a meaningful way but which doesn't detract from the story, only enhances. I love the perculiar style you've used in this and I think the ending works really well. Very well done!

Nice story, but why is it written twice? I thought at first it would be Tsuzuki's POV.

Pretty,kinda scary...very Gothic in its appeal.you have it down twice but maybe I missed something...jeez is he ever gonna say it!

Oh, wow, this made me cry, right when Hisoka started. It filled me with such an aching sadness until the end, when the sweetness is all the more effective because it comes as a surprise. A very soft, subtle, and moving piece.

Ayumu: I have to declare something!
Sakura: And what would that be?
Ayumu: I found this story...
Sakura: uhhuh?
Ayumu: completely confusing.
Sakura: (does anime fall) THAT'S ALL YOU HAVE TO SAY!!?
Ayumu: um yeah.
Sakura: (rolls eyes) Your an idiot.
Ayumu: :|? (very confused)
Sakura: i have to say tha this stopy is very wonderful. I loved the way you repeated words. And it wasn't in an annoying way. You are an acceptional writer.
Ayumu: That still doesn't explain to me what is going on.
Sakura: (sweatdrops) OH my god. I feel like i'm leaving with Tsuzuki.
Ayumu: ?
Sakura: ...stupid.

Oh no... oh no... why can't Hisoka just tell him... I mean really, why can't he just say it, just once, to reassure Tsuzuki. to make him stay... *sad*
Beuatifully written, and sad, and very good. I liked the reason why Hisoka had never grown tired, because he had Tuszuki to live for. But... poor Tsuzuki... he had Hisoka, but never knew if he _really_ had him... *tears* How sad!
I really liked it, really. Beautifully written, characterization was great... it's one of those fics that make hate YnM as much as I love it, cause it ends sad...
though when I think about it, you wrote a happy ending... *sweatdrop* Anyway, it was so sad... *sniff sniff*

Boosh, ależ sie wzruszylam *__* To bylo takie.. nie, brak mi słów. Piękne, absolutnie piękne

Hehe, nie mogę się powstrzymać, napiszę po polsku, korzystając z okazji. :) Śliczny fanfik, romantyczny, dołująco (w pozytywnym tego słowa znaczeniu; 'dołujący' jak sztuki Szekspira :D) i taki nieco poetycki - hm, może to przez te powtórzenia. :) Wyraźnie czuło się, że każde słowo jest na swoim miejscu.

Wole wprawdzie inną parę ze świata YnM (Muraki-sama... *cough, cough*), ale kiedyś na pewno przeczytam też Twoje drugie opowiadanie, obiecuję. :P

beautiful

wa! really really nice. loved the ending!
naprawde super historyjka. jedna z moich favorites =)

Why aren't there more stories like this?

Gah! mam ochote cie trzepnac!
"“I’m tired,” you said, and I felt that my heart was sinking deep, deep into a black empty void. And I felt lonely. And then…
“But I think I’ll stay a little longer,” you added, and I didn’t understand.
And then you smiled.
And it was one of those smiles that you used to give me back then, so many years ago.
“Because I know that you love me anyway,” you said."

Tak mine straszyc ty!
podoba mi sie jak forma oddaje opisywany nastroj.
Czy moge cie trzepnac? 9.9
ps sorki, ze po polskiemu pisze ale nie moglam sie powstrzymac ^^

Wow. -very- powerful. I'm teary, and that's pretty hard to do.

Wow. I love it! Its so angsty and it makes sense ^^ I could really imagine this kind of thing happeing *sigh* wow, I wish I could write as well as you do ^^ Keep up the good work and don't stop writing! ^^

~Marron-chan

Aw, that was very sweet. I really the repetiveness of the dialouge, it was an interesting techinique. Nice idea. Good story, overall.