Ah, what a sweet little story. I can see this happening to the characters - it all fits together well.

Wow. Jack reading the ledger and knowing each signature is genius. It's another look into his character. I always thought that when Jack wasn't speaking he was watching people, things-- just watching.

And I never thought about it on my own, but not all of them could read or even write, a bad thing for a newsie. Some would just scribble.

Volunteering Racetrack just because he wasn't there is classic and so funny. My friends are like that.

Oh no, David was caught. Well, he couldn't keep it up forever anyway. His parents are right, education is the best thing for him, even if it's the least fun.

Mush won the round. Aww. He's cute and funny. Seeing the guys hang out together are some of the funnest scenes to read, especially if they're funny.

Mush spilt soda on Jack's bandanna. Oh no he didn't! That bandanna is sacred, though it really should be washed every now and then. Anyway...

Amazing chapter

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You are a good story teller, especially for this being your first fanfiction.

The little details really add to and make a story, subtule (however you spell it) movements that a character makes naturally like Jack kicking his heels or just a simple glare.

Poor Jack. He's having a hard time with Spot. I've never thought of them as buddies, but they aren't rivals either. Spot just doesn't understand what happened.

And David, I didn't know he had it in him to skip. He has a tough choice between his friends and his education.

Great chapter.

-pen 'n notebook

Truthfully I've already read this before, and loved it, but I am now finally going to review like I should have the first time.

Wow. This is great because it really sounds like what would have happened after the movie. Great idea.

All the boys felt in character. I love Jack and David's friendship, and you really showed it here. Eventually David would have to leave, but they hoped he never had to. Jack's there for him at least.

I love Race here too. He's funny insulting that man and running from him. He swore in English and Italian--I never thought about that before, but he probably would know both languages.

Great chapter.

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Great story. I enjoyed it a lot! :D

My, this was such a sweet story. I really loved how many concepts you crammed into one fic: David going back to school, Jack's turning scab not sitting well with the others, Race going back to Brooklyn... all great.

Best bit of characterization in the whole fic:

“Is it?” Mush asked. “Race said Jack let us all down. Does it mean now that he didn’t?”

That is so perfectly MUSH! Sweet and confused and kind of like a child. *huggles Mush*

Anyway, the dialogue and little actions by all of the newsies was natural and accurate to their characters. And you didn't draw it out too much, either. It ended just the way it should've. Nice job! :)

AWESOME STORY! That was great writing and I loved every part of it. Chapters 6 and 8 were my favorite. It was just so...so...awesome! :-P
Now I wish they would make a sequel for Newsies and use this story. Great job!

This story is simply amazing! Your writing was really good and the arguments were so...powerful? Well, basically, it was VERY good! I love Race, as you can tell by my username. :P (I love The Beatles as well!) Well, the way you wrote Spot, Race, Jack, Mush, and David (and everyone else) was really good (I'm saying the word 'good' a lot, aren't I? Well, it IS good!) I hope you write more newsie stories as good as this one!
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Carryin' Da Banner!

Excellent story. Very well-written. I appreciate that you wrote dialouge the way it would have been spoken only slightly and not full-out word changes that aren't understandable (I hate that). It was all great, I loved the charactor depth and the discriptions and everything. You portrayed people just as they seemed they would have been in the movie, and not as 'these ultra hot newsie charactors that are without fault'.
Bravo to you!

Oh, neat how Jack accepts Spot's forgiveness through Race, rather than in person. Its so Jack/Spot. Hehe, poor Mush, he's like the guy running around in the middle trying to catch the ball.Wow that was a weird analogy. Anyhoo, moral: yea Mush!
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Hahah, I liked the "Jacky-boy" name part. Genius, pure genius ;0)
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Everything is back to normal and it tied up so nicely. Congradulations! YOu have completed a fic! *bows* and a wonderful one at that. Excellent! Bravo! Very nice work :0)

The way you began the chpater, an impersonal more objective, view was quite effetive. hehe I like how you can make "bummer" and "dumb" sound really insulting ;0)
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Aw Race and Jack are friends again yea!!I like how you incorporated the title. I had one of those lightbulb moments that make me feel intelligent when I realized it ;0)
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One more chapter?! Oh no!
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*clicks next chapter, clicks next chapter*

ok i know its a little late to be reviewing but there's an off chance you might read this. this story was amazing! there's not enough good race ff's out there and this is truly one of the best i have read in a long time! thanks and i cant wait to read another one of your stories! great job

Aw. That was such a cute ending! I actually thought it was going to be over when they walked into the lodging house and everyone was shouting Race's name (which was also really cute). But I liked how it just all goes back to normal for Race. It ended the way a Disney movie would. I loved it!

whoa!
that was a good story, its done YAY!
good job! give the girl some claps! *enthusiastic appluase*
i liked the ending very much. can't wait to read your NEXT story! heehee
byebye then
bookey

Wow, VERY nice ending. I love the way this story turned out, it's beautifully written and concieved; your characterizations are amazing. I really hope you've got more stories up your sleeve, because I'd love to see more from you.
No problem with the advice at the beginning; I'm glad you found it useful. I'm glad to be of service for something as great as this.
Congrats on finishing it up; you did a truly wonderful job. :D