I love the story.
~Kyla~

I know it's been awhile since you wrote this, but may I offer a suggestion? Instead of having Watson imeadiatly give in to Sandra's affections, have him struggle with it. His gentlemanly side fighting against his erm, "urges". He knows that it is wrong, that it would be taking advantage(or so he thinks at the time) of her emotional state. Really make it clear that he's fighting hard-and Sandra senses this and maybe tries to kiss him, and he finds himself weakening,and starts to kiss back even as he tries to push her away and tell her she needs to get a hold of herself. And maybe at that moment Holmes could walk in on them. So when Holmes makes his remarks, Watson is defending Sandra partly out of his own guilt for even slightly surrendering to her. Just an idea, you're more than free to ignore me.

Lovely piece of fiction. Just lovely.

That was very dramatic. I dislike chapter 9, but I really like the rest of it. Great story! :)

I enjoyed it, and it was brilliantly written, and this would have gone into my favs at once if it wasn't for said Chapter 9. C'est la vie, and c'est le livre!

"He enjoys a flair for the dramatic" Yep, that's Holmes! Even half-dead, he's dramatic!

That HURT!! That was not fair, that was not nice and that was nasty!

Ugh. You spoiled a good story with this chapter. Ugh again.

Wonderful job recreating Holmes here! Showing his jealousy over Watson's liking for Mrs Verne - great! And all his snide remarks about women *snicker* "falling" for Watson...ROFL!!

Great story! It's all in Watson's style so far!
Love this sentance:

“Allow me to congratulate you on a brilliant bit of deduction,” he said acridly.

That's what Basil Rathbone says!!

Wonderful Story! Great job!

Iv just finished,definetly one for my fav stories list! Well done

That was really great! I wish we would've been able to see the bad guys hang. When Holmes was being beaten, I was cringing at every word. You have such a flair describing th elittle things, so that makes the story seem way more real.

I took you up on your offer and decided to read this story. I'm very pleased with it so far; some of the phrases are so Canon-esque it's perfect!

Of course Watson is ever "the hopeless romantic".

You're so good at dropping these tiny little hints and making the story a page-turner. Thank you!

He-he! I knew that Smith must play some part in this when she mentioned him. Thank you very much for using another of Holmes' interesting foes besides Moriarty. He is way over-done.
I love the line 'it is not my concern whether you can breath or not.' That is so Holmes!
A minor point-
what is up with the way they address each other? Every other word is 'old man' or something. They do that only rarely in the novels.