Good job so far on this story.

please update!

hey, i know it sounds stupid but you could probably get some ideas from this book im reading 'Deep Midnight' ok? its by shannon drake ok? 0;;)clown nose.heheh

OMG! I can't belive you made Seto and Joey a couple. What's next? Yugi becoming evil? (forget I said that)

Great chapter! Can't wait to see what happens next!

Hope Yami is getting... um nicer..yeah

REALLY nice. CONTINUE SOON?

Interesting still. Not much happening, but still a good ch. So Bakura finally lets Ryou out. Gtg. Ud soon. Till next time. _

nah the chap is cool. Short, but cool. After all, you are one of the few top writers who DO keep on updating (eying half of my fave fic-list)

anyway, just keep up the good spirit, don't get distracted anymore so you can update very soon again

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hum this seems very interesting what is up with the next chapter i mean he is nice to yugi then mean so confused@.@

oh and this thing about self-defence what is... i am ging to shut up soo you can write the next chapter in peice k

but ya

UPDATE SOON!

cool chap! and I'm dieing to know what yugi will do with his new lessons when he finds out poor ryou is kidnapped :P

anyway, I hope you'll update soon!

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Hm... why is it that most of your stories involve child-abuse, or somebody getting abused or taken advantage of by their own weakness in some way? Yes, I did read all your stories, every single one, and I DID notice. (I am sort of fond of "Something Different", Draco is a cutie in it, though it's confusing as all hell sometimes).

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The story itself is good, and I truely enjoyed it until I found out that almost all of your stories were of the same general nature. It seems a bit strange that Bakura would let his intentions and posessive nature out so early in the relationship. I mean, the second day? That seems a bit much. However, it does happen in real life quite frequently, lovers start showing signs of their true behavior early on and the significant other "loves them too much" to notice or take action.

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I laughed at Yugi and Yami's relationship. I assumed you put it in for comic relief until I realized you were getting serious about it. "You're going to play video games with me until I tell you that you can sleep." I mean - that's so wierd. Ryou and Bakura's was much more realistic, and I genuinely felt concern for Ryou, whereas I couldn't find myself feeling the same for Yugi. Mabey because I don't like Yugi as much as I like Ryou. Or mabey it's because you didn't delve into Yugi's relationship with Yami enough before making it so abusive.

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Either way, it's well written, though I did notice sometimes your 'was' and 'wasn't's get confused alot. It sucked me in, though sometimes I was raising my eyebrow at the Yugi and Yami parts. Somehow that part just didn't seem as believable as the Ryou and Bakura parts, and it didn't suck me in as much. Needless to say, good work.

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Also, try to stray into different genres and topics when writing fics. I noticed with one or two of your fanfics you actually strayed. Try to do that more often and I'm sure your fanfics will have more impact and individuality.

Interesting excerpt and story. _ Poor Ryou, in both cases that is. Well, ud soon. Till next time. _

hm..this chapter is really good...not that all of them aren't. :) continue soon!

WOW! Poor Yugi and Ryou! I feel so sorry for them! Great fic though... it's really sad.

(you made a comment in ch.3 about burning grill cheese. my gf burnt water once... it's sad really)

hm...possessive neh? eh...abusive relationships...::sigh::...CONTINUE SOON!