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| Thyryam 2007-06-02 ch 1,  | abuseVery nice and very cute =). Nice writing. Having Keitaro actually change after 3 years (being able to dodge Naru's attack, for example) was an interesting change. Authors tend to keep everyone the same over periods of time, so I like this. |
| brindani 2007-02-14 ch 1, | abuseThis is a nice little fic. I do have a suggestion. Keitaro just dumping Naru like that is a little unrealistic especially after three years. There needs to be a little more to make it viable. A little introspective on Keitaro's part would work rather well here. Something along the lines of: ...She pressed a small hand to his chest, over his heart. Keitaro's eyes went distant as visions of the past three years flashed through his mind. Images of Naru hitting him over and over. That powerful feeling he once called love slowly crumbling under each assalt. He remembered Shinobu standing nearby each time with words of comfort and a first aid kit. He blinked at the hand lightly touching his chest. He slowly turned back to Shinou with an awed expression... Just a suggestion. Very cute, brindani |
| Kei_kun 2003-11-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseOkay Im just wondering if your going to keep this story going, because if you are Ill read it. |
| TornadoReviewer 2003-11-15 ch 1, | abuseYAHOO!!Another great Keitaro/Shinobu romance! Update soon because they are one of my favourite anime couples! And try to humiliate Naru a little more:) KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! |
| Andrew Joshua Talon 2003-11-15 ch 1, | abuse(waves KeiShin flags) WOO HOO! Not another KeiNaru fic! Go you! GO you! Nicely done and sweet! I commend you! Please, write more soon! You hae a nice, easy-flowing writing style, which I must say I find very appealing! Keep it up! Keep it up! |
| shinobu 2003-11-15 ch 1, anon. | abusewai! this deserves a sequel or a chapter 2! |
| shinobu 2003-11-15 ch 1, anon. | abusewai! this deserves a sequel or a chapter 2! |
| Rion 2003-11-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseEEr, actually I was trying to type 'sooweet' but I put too many Os and Es that it was shorten to sowet... |
| Mantis Man 2003-11-14 ch 1, | abuseYou've got a good thing going here. It will be interesting to see if this turns into a K/S fic, or if Naru gets her act together and takes her turn in the hot seat of having to fight for love ;) |
| Knight's Shadow 2003-11-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseReally good. |
| Sephimorg 2003-11-14 ch 1, | abuseYay, thank you for posting my cookie! And now that my compy's back, I can write all of my plot bunnies and finish my Kei/Shin fic! |
| Rion 2003-11-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseSOWET! Is this going to be a one shot? I hope you will continue it! |