This is fantastic!

Very sad, but I loved the insights at the ending.

woah, never seen this slash pairing before...you have a messed up mind (joking)^^
It's very nice, though, monolouges are pretty hard to do (at least I find them so)

Nice, very nice. Good point at the end there. I'm also impressed that you don't need reviews to feel validated ;-)

Hehehe, that was cool. I love Neo/Smith slash.

Better! You're weakness is not in your subject matter (Lord knows how I adore The Slash); it lies in your characterization, and sometimes your choice of words. I don't think it makes Trinity feel physically ill when she thinks about Smith and Neo (that is, if you go with her mindframe in this story)

I think you have some really good insights as to why Trinity might let Neo go. You just have to practice a bit more to refine your vernacular.

Good luck with your future stories,
SL4E

Better! You're weakness is not in your subject matter (Lord knows how I adore The Slash); it lies in your characterization, and sometimes your choice of words. I don't think it makes Trinity feel physically ill when she thinks about Smith and Neo (that is, if you go with her mindframe in this story)

I think you have some really good insights as to why Trinity might let Neo go. You just have to practice a bit more to refine your vernacular.

Good luck with your future stories,
SL4E

This was very tantalising; it just interested me to see Trin's reaction to this. Normally, you would find a Trin chucking a spazz when her One and Only is in love with the Enemy.

However, you've displayed a different viewpoint very nicely. I like her monologue, she understands yet is confused.

Anyhoo, fab job and a great read!