 XxMemories4everxX 2009-02-08 . chapter 1This is fantastic! |
 Sylvia Sylverton 2004-08-15 . chapter 1Very sad, but I loved the insights at the ending. |
 nonedk 2004-03-01 . chapter 1woah, never seen this slash pairing before...you have a messed up mind (joking)^^
It's very nice, though, monolouges are pretty hard to do (at least I find them so) |
 ThePet 2004-02-02 . chapter 1Nice, very nice. Good point at the end there. I'm also impressed that you don't need reviews to feel validated ;-) |
 Fedishi 2003-12-22 . chapter 1Hehehe, that was cool. I love Neo/Smith slash. |
 SmithLurve4eva 2003-11-17 . chapter 1 Better! You're weakness is not in your subject matter (Lord knows how I adore The Slash); it lies in your characterization, and sometimes your choice of words. I don't think it makes Trinity feel physically ill when she thinks about Smith and Neo (that is, if you go with her mindframe in this story)
I think you have some really good insights as to why Trinity might let Neo go. You just have to practice a bit more to refine your vernacular.
Good luck with your future stories,
SL4E |
 SmithLurve4eva 2003-11-17 . chapter 1 Better! You're weakness is not in your subject matter (Lord knows how I adore The Slash); it lies in your characterization, and sometimes your choice of words. I don't think it makes Trinity feel physically ill when she thinks about Smith and Neo (that is, if you go with her mindframe in this story)
I think you have some really good insights as to why Trinity might let Neo go. You just have to practice a bit more to refine your vernacular.
Good luck with your future stories,
SL4E |
 funkless 2003-11-15 . chapter 1 This was very tantalising; it just interested me to see Trin's reaction to this. Normally, you would find a Trin chucking a spazz when her One and Only is in love with the Enemy.
However, you've displayed a different viewpoint very nicely. I like her monologue, she understands yet is confused.
Anyhoo, fab job and a great read! |