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| Sylvia Sylverton 2004-08-15 ch 1,  | abuseVery sad, but I loved the insights at the ending. |
| nonedk 2004-03-01 ch 1, | abusewoah, never seen this slash pairing before...you have a messed up mind (joking)^^ It's very nice, though, monolouges are pretty hard to do (at least I find them so) |
| ThePet 2004-02-02 ch 1, | abuseNice, very nice. Good point at the end there. I'm also impressed that you don't need reviews to feel validated ;-) |
| Fedishi 2003-12-22 ch 1, | abuseHehehe, that was cool. I love Neo/Smith slash. |
| SmithLurve4eva 2003-11-17 ch 1, anon. | abuseBetter! You're weakness is not in your subject matter (Lord knows how I adore The Slash); it lies in your characterization, and sometimes your choice of words. I don't think it makes Trinity feel physically ill when she thinks about Smith and Neo (that is, if you go with her mindframe in this story) I think you have some really good insights as to why Trinity might let Neo go. You just have to practice a bit more to refine your vernacular. Good luck with your future stories, SL4E |
| SmithLurve4eva 2003-11-17 ch 1, anon. | abuseBetter! You're weakness is not in your subject matter (Lord knows how I adore The Slash); it lies in your characterization, and sometimes your choice of words. I don't think it makes Trinity feel physically ill when she thinks about Smith and Neo (that is, if you go with her mindframe in this story) I think you have some really good insights as to why Trinity might let Neo go. You just have to practice a bit more to refine your vernacular. Good luck with your future stories, SL4E |
| funkless 2003-11-15 ch 1, anon. | abuseThis was very tantalising; it just interested me to see Trin's reaction to this. Normally, you would find a Trin chucking a spazz when her One and Only is in love with the Enemy. However, you've displayed a different viewpoint very nicely. I like her monologue, she understands yet is confused. Anyhoo, fab job and a great read! |