up-date asap plz!

Good Read. The grammar could use a little work but it's an interesting story. I hope to see more.

not TOO bad of a story,... although,... I think if Ranma were to sleep with Shampoo, then disappear for life, she would be dishonored and probably killed for her failure. Not my idea, but after the first time of returning a failure, she got the jusenkyo curse.

Ukyo... would probably act like that, though I doubt she would wait that long before looking for 'her' Ranma.

In interesting story to say the least. I like where you are going with it. Nabiki is an interesting choice to pair with Ranma. How much of their current lives do they have access to? Also, how much of Ranma's old skill will he maintain? Was he able to add skill on top since he has an additional 10 years to learn? Also, why didn't he fight with his battle spatula against Nabiki? It would be interesting to see Ranma fight with a weapon, get disarmed, the surprise the hell out of his opponent when he fights even better without it.

I know you are probably trying hard to maintain proper grammar. Please try to capitalize the beginnings of sentences.

Example:
"Mission complete I only ensured that Akane don't get jealous about the others and probably they thought each other are lying I also ensured that Akane meet a nice fellow to marry him and forget about Ranma" Onna-Ranma#1 said

Suggested structure:
"Mission complete. I only ensured that Akane didn't get jealous of the others. They probably thought each other was lying. I also made sure that Akane met a nice fellow to marry and forgot about Ranma", said Onna-Ranma#1.

I won't say that my modification was good, but, the tenses agree and 'ensured' is not repeated. Maybe a collaboration with a person with copyedit skills would help. I hope that this is taken as constructive criticism and be encouraged that I am intrigued enough to spend the time on comments.
Ciao,
Wes

I like this one. Lots of twists and turns. Are Shampoo and Ukyo ever gonna talk and find out both were visited by Ranma. Will Ranma and Nabiki have to confess who there are? It is clear that both love their new family and their family loves them. Does Nabiki have to give the kiss of marriage now? Can't wait to see what happens next.

Finally an Update! I was worried for a while that you wouldn't be update anymore. I really like your story. Thank you for the mention. (",)
This is a really interesting plot. Will Perfume now be hunting Ranma? Will Shampoo and Ukyou reach a compromise and will Shampoo and Ukyou find out that Ranma was reincarnated?
About the story ideas.. sure go ahead I dont mind at all.. Feel free to email me.. Again great story. Hoping to hear from you..

Glad to see you revitalizing this story. If you still need a prereader, let me know and I'll be glad to help.

I like the original premise of the story. I figure your next chapter will be about them learning of their past (it would be nice to know whether Nabiki and Ranma can pursue a relationship or if they are siblings considering who their parents are). As well as maybe include more about how Ranma and Nabiki's former relationship came about.

Good luck and good writing.

Innortal

Interesting.. It seemed a little rushed, but interesting nonetheless. I have a story with a couple similarities that I haven't worked on in ages. For one thing the kids have different parents in mine. At any rate I'm looking forward to the next chapter..

You do run-on sentences almost as much as I whip people with towels. That's saying something. Alright whenever you have someone speaking, it should always end in a comma if it's not the end of the entire sentence. Example of how you could clean this up.

The Tendo household was distressed, she was very sick and the doctors couldn't save her, Ranma grabbed the man "what do you mean you cannot save her" Ranma asked with a voice full of sorrow.

Here is my revision...(my corrections will be capitalized. Things like punctuation won't be (for obvious reasons), so you'll have to look for that)

The Tendo household was distressed, NABIKI was very sick, and the doctors couldn't save her. Ranma grabbed the man EXCLAIMING WITH HIS VOICE FULL OF SORROW, "What do you mean you CAN'T save her?"

I am not perfect (in fact, I probably speak my second language better than my first), but every single sentence (as far as I could tell) was a run-on.

"A" (the word) is used before words that don't begin with a vowel.

"an smart one indeed,"

This should be..

"A smart one indeed."

"An" is used for words that begin with vowels. It's also used for words like herb, in which the 'h' is silent.

Aw! That's sso cute! Sorry my sister has been showing me cute images and said 'Look how cute it is! Aw this ones so cute' *shudder* Mental note: Never EVER alove your sister to show you her favorites pictures.

Keep updating this marvelous story.

Hope you don't abandon it, I liked it a lot

Love your story!
i especially like how its a Ranma/Nabiki story...
Id like to see how Nabiki progresses as an amazon and how the two will meet...
cant wait for the next one!
('',)

Nabiki/Ranma matchup??I like the sound of that:)

wow! cool but just how the HECK did ranma get ukyo AND shampoo pregnant?? (i mean i know how but i mean psycologicaly)