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| Fantastical Queen Ebony Bla... 2005-05-05 ch 1,  | abuseVery Itachi. I liked that first phrase 'Itachi stalked...' Very well done. |
| firedraygon 2003-11-26 ch 1, | abuseItachi! ^^ Heh, I love him. This was great! Please write more soon! ~fd97 |
| hattuteline 2003-11-25 ch 1, | abuseThe image is actually painted very well already in the 200 or so words. The two first lines are too slow and obscure starting point, though, and you could have just left them out. I mean... What exactly was so comforting in the thick forest? And what was so cold in the trees? What does the reader get out from this? Otherwise I like the style and the feeling very much. This kind of vision and directing in the text would make a very good quality long fiction. Maybe here and there there's one word too many, but I can point only the word "thin" in the third line and the word "sharp" later on the taste of his blood. It seems they interfere with what I think is the rhythm of the text. |
| Dark Nemesis 7 2003-11-24 ch 1, | abuse*Gasps* Col.I LIKED it very much.I thought it was well written.Luck be with you and keep it up. |