I absolutely LOVED it! Please dont change.

What a great story idea! You kept the characters true to form. I think that you could definately make this into a longer story (a little wishful thinking on my part - hm... maybe). Please write more!

That's not the end, is it? This was amazing, and I really, really want to see what comes next. You have the characters down pat, and awesome use of description!

You've written a really great story - just a few grammar errors, but other than that it was really, really good. (Sorry for all the reallys, but really! It was!)
Too bad you aren't continuing. :(
Anyway, that's about it. I really enjoyed the story!
:D

WOW that is REALLY good write more please!

OMG what a great story! you have got to keep goin! write more plz plz plz! :D