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| Terisberry 2005-07-13 ch 1,  | abuseI like this story! update soon! |
| Josh 2003-12-01 ch 1, anon. | abuseNot bad! Not bad at all! give chapter 2 to me right now! only a couple of gramatical errors, though. you have a slightly excessive use of comas, and "hero's" should be "heroes," but other than that, good job, kiddo. |
| deity of death1 2003-11-30 ch 1, | abuseTidus/Lulu? @__@ ...ororo... |
| queen of the clarinets 2003-11-29 ch 1, | abuseOh! So this funnel is gonna take her a thousand years into the past! You know, this could turn into a great story; I think I'll keep my eye on this one. And I don't usually read these fanfics... boredom forced me to look through other categories. Yeah, keep up the great writing! |
| The End of Infinity 2003-11-29 ch 1, | abuseFirst I'll start off with the weak points of your story. You tend to shift from first person, to third person views CONSTANTLY, and it can be extremely confusing at times and detracts from the overall quality of your fic. I suggest you correct these mistakes, or simply start doing it in the second chapter. Aside from that, you have minimal spelling errors. The plot and storyline thus far is VERY engaging, I'm left sitting here on the edge of my seat, wondering what's going to happen next. Excellent use of suspense!! And congrats on having the courage to write about this coupling! Bravo, and please continue! |