 Aki Midori 2003-12-22 . chapter 1holy macaroni...
a RuSen!
do you have any idea how much i lo~ve RuSen? maybe you don't. who am i, anyway? a useless nobody.
hehe.
seriously, though... [aki-chan turns critique mode]
you see, your style has its own distinction, simple as it may be. your fic is very simple, yet, very powerful. strong impact to readers and self-proclaimed critiques [like to think of myself as one, when i'm sane] like me.
the way you portrayed Sendoh's emotions was very good. it was as if we're Sendoh himself because *we* feel what we feel. his disappointment, his angst, his defeat... everything.
your words are perfectly chosen- woven together to form a simple, yet, wonderful story.
your plot, though not that 'flashy' and all that, still has its own power to lure readers in.
all in all, your fic is great. i pass to you now some wonderful words given to me, not so long ago.
great things come from great people. ^__^
congratulations on having written a wonderful work.
ja ne,
aki-chan |