Nicely written, I've played some of the game itself, and watched the rest of it as my gamer friend kicked the game's butt. So cool! But I only saw from Niobe's perepective, so there you go. I want to see the fighting between ghost and Trinity, but I'll get to, I know I will. :)
Can't wait for the next chapter, very cool!

Mina: I may end up watching some of the Matrix movies one day. Anyway, that was really good. I love all of your stories!
Kaiya: Interesting.
Mina: I gotta go now! Update soon! Ja!

Mina: Despite the fact that I have never seen any of the Matrix movies that was really good.
Kaiya: I agree.
Mina: I hope you continue this soon. Update soon! Ja!

Love this chapter, made a little more sense. (My friend finshed ETM and is going to show me the cut sceens, YAY!) I love Ghost and Niobe, they rock! I really want to know who the person is who has a gun to Varian's head, should be interesting...
Update soon please :)

Love it. I only just saw bits of Enter the Matrix recently, so I now have an idea about wht's going on. Although I'm still at a loss to place Binary and Axel. In Reloaded, who is the guy with the leg in the splint? Jax or Axel?
To aid understanding, I think it would be good if you put some more description of the crew and their place on the ship, any quirks or things that make them unique into your story. That way people like me who suck at computer games won't look perplexed the entire time :)
Looking forward tot he next chapter :)

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Can't wait 4 the next chapter

U should make ur chapters longer

This is really cool, well discripted, no flames from me.

I really like this chapter! I got my names from being way too bored. You take a letter, a vowel and a letter, S, O, R, and then add an end sound, lin, Sorlin! See? I have a friend and we were beyond bored so we made up a story, which is Granddaughter Prophecy, and he came up with the name Valiant for the ship. I like the idea of using names from the game, but alas I haven't played it so I'll just make them up :)
Keep writing, poor Axel!! I'm a little lost, but I'm sure I'll figure it out eventually, or with the next chapter anyway :)

i like this story very much and i eagerly vait for more chapters.
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Nice. Just a funny thing, there's a captain in my story "Granddaughter Prophecy" called Captian Sorlin of the Valiant. I saw Soren and the Vigilant and I smiled, it's quite a coincedence isn't it :) You know what they say, great minds and all :p Anywho, well written, definately going somewhere and I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter, a little more on the movements of the rebels and their relation to Varian would be good too, suspense is all well and good but I want answers!! :p

Not bad, waiting to hear what Varian has to do with the rebels. Please continue :)