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| Dashed 2008-08-28 ch 19,  | abuseThat was a bit of a let down. It was so good but then it seemed like you got bored writting it. |
| Zero-Vision 2008-08-27 ch 19, | abuseI could live offa your writing. food? who needs food? I have a laptop fulla exquisit literature to sustain me. |
| tripleRRR 2008-08-25 ch 19, | abuseGreat story, the ending was a bit anti climatic but it fit the setting. I am always happy to see new work from you. Keep it up. |
| Anna 2008-08-25 ch 19, anon. | abuseWhat? You're going to end it *there*? Why, oh why did you skip over all those years of relationship? The actual getting together, other people's reactions, and so on... *sigh* It's just sad to miss all those interludes. It feels like a huge chunk of story is supposed to be there, but it isn't. -_- |
| Wispr 2008-08-24 ch 19, | abuseWow... that was an awesome and wonderful story. Thank you for sharing their journey with us! Wispr |
| Dashed 2008-08-24 ch 18, | abuseAw I was really sad to see this chapter end. Poor Corrine, I can’t wait to see how Una starts to meddle in her life. I didn’t see any grammatical errors so congrates! |
| mini-kay 2008-08-23 ch 18, | abusei liked reading this chapter if only for the reason that it was like an e-harmony type of system,even though i know i wasnt meant to be set up that way. i hope the next chapter comes out soon! |
| Wispr 2008-08-23 ch 18, | abuseGreat chapter, really love your idea of world wide Clan communication and singles get together! The ending was truly heart wrenching, bloody powerful writing there! Wispr |
| Dashed 2008-08-21 ch 17, | abuseYour grammar took a slight hit in this chapter but nothing too bad. I’m just glad it was a long chapter! What I think you do very well, which really shone in this chapter, is show emotional struggles going on in other character’s who’s pov you’re not writing from. For example; Demona’s struggle over her disgust for Corrine’s humanity and conflict over Corrine’s actions being noble and worthy of respect is, to me anyway, clearly shown. Or put simply Demona likes Corrine but can’t get past her humanness even though she acts with traits Demona finds honourable. The praying for a breeze comment made me laugh especially Demona’s reaction to it. |
| Obsidian Twilight 2008-08-20 ch 17, anon. | abuseI feel so sad for Corrine.. She was rejected by Demona even after everything she did for her! Well, I have to admit, this chapter was certainly suspenseful. I can't wait for the next installment! |
| Ray Venn Hakubi 2008-08-20 ch 17, | abuse/end. Family Shame At least, that's how it feels to me. Of course, there are plenty more stories to tell about Corrine. ^^ I've enjoyed this story so far, and if you plan to continue it (which I'm guessing you do, since you didn't declare end), I'll certainly recieve any more work with glee. |
| Wispr 2008-08-20 ch 17, | abuseWow what an emotionally charge chapter. How you were able to get across to the reader what Corrine was feeling and going through really showed off your fantastic writing skills. Looking forward to the next chapter! Wispr |
| Dashed 2008-08-17 ch 16, | abuseI can't wait to see the interaction between Demona and Corrine as they work out to spell. To bad Corrine won't be staying at Demona's place. It was funny to see Corrine flirting with human Demona! |
| Obsidian Twilight 2008-08-15 ch 16, anon. | abuseWell, I'm certainly relieved to see that Corrine made it through the night. Unfortunately, it seems that even in a hospital, danger still looms over her. Still, I hope that she and Demona can determine what to do about the pain that happens to her during the day and night. |
| Wispr 2008-08-14 ch 16, | abuseReally glad to see Demona and Corrine starting to spend time together. Can't wait to see where you go next with this! Wispr |