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| Lauren Wagner 2004-02-23 ch 1,  | abuseOh this one gave me chills down my spine! this was really good! |
| Ludi 2004-01-12 ch 1, | abuseWell, I read this a while back, but at the time I couldn't leave a review (darn server), so i shall duly leave one now... I really liked this piece. It's very tightly structured, very to the point and very elegantly written. You have some wonderful allusions as well - for instance 'passing like smoke through villages', 'a sky marred by turmoil', 'a cheek that would have otherwise shamed chinaware'. Lovely stuff. And you really put across the initial sense of destitution with the surroundings, with the sense of quiet, and in the greyness of Deathstrike herself. Great work. |