Good story,I hope you are still around and have written more on this fic or have an outline or anything! If so, please update! Regardless, I hope you have continued writing other fiction. Your story has inspired me to re-read "Tunnel". If others are hanging, as I am, waiting for updates on this story... maybe you will write fan-fic or cross-overs for Heinlein's universes. Chapter one is certainly popular, Please keep this story alive. Update!?! ;)

A nice begining withsame feeling i remember from many years ago that I read Tunnel in the Sky. i look foreward to further chaptes.

12/11/03..Hmm..Four years since an update. I wish I had noticed the date before I read this. It was a good start. You caught the RAH style fairly well. Are you going to finish it? Are you even around any more? I'm adding you to my story alert list, just in case.

Even though I have never read his books and didn't get A LOT of the fic it seemed pretty good. I know you're probably thinking that if I've never read his books why i'm reading the fic. It's just because(although you might not believe me) Robert Heinlein is like my 3rd cousin or something and when i saw his name on here it interested me to see what fics people wrote for his books...hehe this review probably sounds really stupid, but i think you did a very good job with the story(although that probably means nothing since i've never read the book)

Before i make and even bigger fool of myself

Keep up the good writing~
Jenn~

Just amazing! Tunnel is one of my long-time favorites and you captured the style and tone beautifully. I hope you keep writing!

It has been quite a while since I read Tunnel, but you have my interest.

I look forward to finding out what happens.

Thanks for your words.

Roger

awesome! I love robert heinlein. But, I wonder, has anyone besides me ever read the moon is a harsh mistress? I think I'll right a fic on that...or maybe that's just me wishing that mike somehow survived. EAnyhow, keep up the good work, fellow heilein fan! (note-this is for the whole fic)

good and plausible start - fits with the story - now where's the rest of it? keep it coming, better that all these starship troopers tales from people who don't seem to have read the book

This is GREAT, and I hope to see more soon! "Tunnel in the Sky" is my very VERY favorite Heinlein juvie book, and I've read it many many times. I know it intimately, and you've remained true to both the story and Heinlein's writing style, esp. regarding Rod.

I saw the selections under Heinlein and figured it'd be mostly Starship Troopers. I literally gasped when I saw this!! I'm marking this as a favorite story and hope there's more forthcoming!

I liked it it was what i have always tried to write but could never quiet good enough. whens the next chp come out?

this is good! i espec like da way u didnt put da chars 2 ooc... :)

Hi there. I just found the Heinlein section in the books category. I've been a big Heinlein fan since I first read 'Tunnel in the Sky' when I was 13...I've read just about everything he's written since. I'll keep track of how this story goes, good writing so far, you're doing well at sticking with the Heinlein philosyphy.

Excellent writing -- you have the Old Man's touch with his characters. You did the foreshadowing very well -- not rubbing the reader's nose in it but alerting him to possible dangers, some of which Rod & Co. will be facing. The only critique I'd give is that a rewrite on this chapter should keep in mind the principle "Don't tell 'em; show 'em." I look forward to reading more of this -- and the style and pacing are good enough that you should contact the Heinlein Society to see if you can get permission to publish when it's complete (the characters and scenario aren't copyrighted, of course, but working WITH their endorsement rather than bucking them might make the difference in saleability).

It's a decent start. There is a lot of description at the beginning that isn't really useful if you've just read Tunnel, or even are fairly familiar with it.

I liked how you touched on the change that the survivors of that 2-year survival course undertook... how they came back so much more mature than before. I don't know if you are interested in using this, but I think that maturity could really add some characterization to Rod. For instance, when he first steps out into the new world, his senses seem to heighten and he gets the hunted feeling. Remember, one of the main ideas behind Tunnel was that there are always stober out there... you may think you are the hunter, but if you do, you may find yourself to be the hunted. I think Rod would be experienced enough at this point to be VERY wary of even places he knows are safe. For instance, the time of year can drastically change whether a place is safe or not...

Ok, this review's getting kind of long. I don't know if you are even considering editing this any... I think you should, because it has great potential. I was always disappointed where the novel left off, a sequel is definitely in order.

Nice follow-on, I like the way you portray the veterans and the reaction of rookies to them, but I do have one question - is this the end of the story, or the beginning? Either way it's good, but I'd like to read more.