Oh, I forgot to mention. How exactly is Eamerica split up? In the first chapter you mentioned it was split in two, "centered in Boston, and California." Until the next chapter I thought the centers in Boston and California were running one cohesive country. However in chapter 2, Sarah mentions trying to flee to Canada or California. So is California separated from Boston? It might make things easier if you gave the Eamerica running California a different name. Or, I think that's how it works?

Another addendum: I really liked how Jareth was dressed last chapter. I take it his new sense of fashion is in keeping with the Underground being behind the times. Also, will the Underground in following Above, eventually go to war/have a plague? And I enjoyed the kiss last chapter. (holy smokes, I must be bird-brained to have forgotten all this! D: )


Anyways, this chapter. I take it the hound the Falconer encountered was the one ones Jareth ordered released last chapter? I take it he's evil too.

"Good morning, Sarah." That was unexpected.

Loved the scene with the glass turning into butterflies. It was beautiful, and very vivid.

"I didn't know!" I don't understand the significance of that. Something to do with touching I think though.

"See? Jareth had told her. Your word sufficed. (break) Whatever he had been trying to tell her, she felt lost." I was a bit confused at that line; it seemed he was addressing something she hadn't said.

"I am pleased you're wearing it." Even his speech is tense there.

""Goblin King," she threw back at him, "ruling your petty kingdom with your magic and your damned crystals."" That line seems purposefully out of place. Hm. Again, it feels like she's answering an unspoken question.

And oh no! Sarah's done something wrong to let the Falconer in! D:

Well, I hope you continue to write this, and if not, it's still a very unique, well-written and excellent fic! :)

"In that space of angled shadows, he kissed her" I LOVE that line so very, very much. I would draw in hearts here if it were on paper.

I think you're going to have to point blank explain the "cycles," because it took me most of the chapter to realize there were more lifetimes than two. At that point, a lot of confusion cleared, but I think it can easily become overwhelming unless you explain it in a later chapter. (Heck, it might be in the next chapter and then I'll take all this back.)

But I love this chapter. The fic is so utterly unique and enthralling! I'm rushing off to the next chapter now!

This is such a splendid departure from what I usually come across in the Labyrinth fandom. The atmosphere is so very different, and I think that's what stands out the most. Sarah so quickly bargaining for Tommy as well pops out. T'm quite eager to read the next chapter now!

Great story. I love the futuristic sci-fi elements, and the idea that Sarah's lifetime is cycling. I would love more stories of other incarnations of Sarah as one offs, dreams, or memories. I noticed it has been a few years, but I hope you consider updating. I'm so curious to see where it could go.

This story really is a magnificent beginning. Are you never going to finish it?

Oh this is so great!
Please update, i really wnat to know how this story continues/concludes

Hey girl, I LOVE your style! I hope you find time to work on this as well as your other stories because they are coming along so nicely.

p.s. Its early january - where's the update...no pressure!

This is one of those stories that leaves you going 'what the **...?' the whole way through, and that's the only problem I have with it. It's very odd, very hard to picture, and so unlike the movie in any way that it's just hard to wrap your mind around.

Beautiful and extremely well conceived, as always. A little slow in coming, but the real world doesn't always make allowances for fanfiction, and writer's block is never fun either.

Eagerly awaiting the last chapter...I really hope you continue on with more LB fanfiction after this and that the love hasn't apssed...the fanworld desperately needs more talented authors like you.

Wow...I...wow...that was amazing, I truly look forward to the next chapter! Your chapters are so long, it's wonderful, and your writing style is just amazing! :) Keep up the amazing work!

yes, please do update soon!

Ok, so: I know I said I loved the first chapter, and these last two just as good. So, I want to know exactly what happened with Sarah's first life, and I so want the Falconer dead, AND I want to know if the messed up "Earth" gets to stay that way. You have a wonderfully flowing script so keep up the good work!

Wow, this is amazing; I really love it. Love the original concept, love the writing style, love it all. Keep up the great work.

Wow.. magnificent. I wouldn't worry too much about the infrequent updates if I were you, write when you're inspired, the writing's better that way.

I really like this story and where you seem to be taking it. Looking forward to more updates.

ages and ages i waited for more on this story and i'm so happy that you wrote more that i could dance.
i love your word use and images. sarah and jareth are wonderful. you're awesome. really. i mean it.