Well you certainly have a talent for writing. Just a couple things bugged me though. First, you called Fukushu a lanorik so many times I almost thought lanorik was his name. Also, you may want to add more suspense by leaving the reader hanging at the beginning. You described why lanorik had come to kill the Saiyans pretty quickly...it kind of took away a lot of mystery that could have been used. Other than that, you did a good job describing fight scenes and did pretty well keeping everyone in character. The humor at the end was a good touch too.

I enjoyed this a lot. You have a great grasp of the characters, excellent spelling and grammar and the storyline in itself was done well. I liked Fukushu, he didn't seem like a Marty Stu at all, and the twist with the spirit in the sword was great.
Are we going to hear more from him later?