Hey! Just wanted to tell you that this is really really good! obviously i am satine was better because sequels are never as good but this comes pretty close! Hope to hear from you soon

TTFN ~*fairy pwincess*~

I loved I am Satine! This one isn't as good but it is good too.(No story is better than I am Satine)

Can sum1 read my story please, and give me a review? Please and Thank you

I took your advice and read "I am Satine". It was quite a beautiful story, as is this one. It is a very lovely idea and I do hope that you shall continue soon.
Update as soon as you are able to.
Great stories!

~Pandora

Really really good! Awsome! I love it! Please, please, please write more!

I just have time for a quick note, dear (more verbosity to come at a later date, I hope): this chapter is by FAR the best of the four -- your writing is really developing and improving with each thing you write; and you manage to keep this chapter moving and interesting and juggle shifting POV's and multi-character dialogue. Keep up the good work, I'm eager to see more!

I like that you've developed Louise and Juliette as very distinct and separate personalities (the scene between Louise and the horse Snow White is lovely; excellent that you've shown a character that other characters see as superior or flawless to have insecurities like everyone else.) And I love Juliette's take on both Satine (unlike fics which make Satine out to be flawless) and especially on Christian: //She couldn't imagine what her mother saw in this cold and dirty man. he wasn't even attractive.// *teehee* I adore Ewan as much as the next gal, but it is refreshing to get a different take on Christian!

Hiya!
I like this fic! really good! Moulin Rouge is my fav movie ever!
And in response to your review on "The Truth"--Well, Alanna does hate lies. but in fact she did lie for 8 years about herself in order to achieve her dream. Well, in order to be happy w/ Jon and keep George at a distance, she has to lie. Do you see any other way? Eventually she will indeed tell the truth because her conscience will break free. The title was the fic actually is symbolic to the entire fic: The fact (well in my opinion) that Jon never loved Thayet; The truth in which Alanna and jon still love one another; and the truth both will have to face due to their actions. It's kinda the point to my entire story. PLEASE KEEP READING AND REVIEWING!

An orange? Yeah, thats a hell of a "special treat"! Oranges were 1. rare, 2. had to be imported- they did not grow in London or France. 3. very costly and 4. hard to keep fresh.
And a cliffhanger. URK! But, your writing has inproved and I love your contiuation of "I am Satine".

interesting...write more!

Wow this is really sad. The memories are just beautiful and it's a good choice of song.

Louise is easily the most interesting character here, and very nicely shaded--rather complex, nice and nasty in turns, but never a complete villian or victim. You show with here how everyone can have their good and bad sides, and do things that they immediately regret (been there, done that *sigh*). I assume Juliette will be developed further in upcoming chapters? I also assume she's the protagonist since she's Satine's daughter, so you'll want to make sure her character is as well-developed as Louise. Interesting interaction between the three girls, by the way (not an easy thing to maintain), and I also liked the whole thing about Danielle feeling outdone in every way by her superior younger sister.
A beta, by the way, (correct me if I'm wrong, Rougepots!) is a bit like an editor--someone who previews your story for typos, notes what works beautifully and what needs clarification, or simply says, "Good job! Keep writing!"

I see some definite improvements in the prose from it's predecessor. You're ideas are always good ones or at least intriguing; in the past, I've had trouble getting through the tale because of the length and density of the paragraphs. You've done a much better job here of breaking porse into shorter chunks, tightening the prose for maximum impact. Satine's memories here make me want to go back to "I am Satine...". And the part about her simply trying to remember her own name is rather stunning.
As before, I urge you to get a beta-reader (even the summary has typos, and there are some people who won't read a fic for that reason, because they assume more of the same.) I hope I'm not sounding harsh or discouraging, because you've really given Satine a complete history and I appreciate that very much. But even if it's one of your parents, etc--please have your text proofread before posting.
I wondered by the POV suddenly switches to third-person in that last chapter, when everything up until then has been 1st person. I prefer the first person perspective, by the way; it's more vivid and immediate.
I offer my services as beta, by the way, and I'll be glad to go more in-depth with this if you like. (Or you can tell me to p* off, I'll understand.)
--Janice