That was great! I loved how tangible and layered the imagery was, and your writing has such style! I like the way you phrase your ideas. Please write us more!

Please get a basic grammar book and review sentence structure and paragraphs. This is very difficult to read.

Great start! I'm a fan of animal mindspeech, too! Have you read any Mercedes Lackey or Tamora Pierce books? If you like wolves and dogs in particular, I suggest that you read 'Wild Magic' by Tamora Pierce. I can hardly wait to read more of your story!
Sending mischief your way!
Snowfire the Kitsune