Reviews for To Duel the Lioness

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Tortall101 2006-10-14 ch 1,	abuseI love this story and think it works really well as a one-shot.
LadyKnightOfHollyrose 2005-12-26 ch 1,	abuse^_^ love it!
Lady 0f Masbolle 2005-09-30 ch 1,	abuseAwesoem
Caremel 2005-04-15 ch 1,	abuseI love your fic! that is exactly what I think would have happened. Great job!
SilentRiver 2005-01-24 ch 1,	abuseReally good writing.
Lucie - or Lux 2004-12-20 ch 1,	abuseI don't know if you're still interested in concrit, since it seems you haven't written much in sometime, but I thought I'd offer some nonetheless. This sentence: "..to beat the pants of Nealan?" I'm sure you meant off - it's just one of those annoying little typos that so few authors notice. Also, I think it's rather unrealistic to mention that Keladry has /never/ used her sword in battle. Certainly she relies on her glaive much of the time, but I seriously doubt that she hadn't /ever/ used Griffin, no matter her dependence on the glaive. Another thing: " 'Hey!' Alanna complained." Never, ever, not once, did the Tortallans in Ms Pierce's books use the word "hey". It is dreadfully close to chat-speak, and tends to jerk readers out of the story when they hear Alanna talking like an American teenybopper. Other than that, this was a well-concieved idea, and overall was well-written. I had no intention of being hurtful in this review, just to help you improve your writing. Thanks for taking the time to listen!
Celebrian Lossehelin 2004-10-16 ch 1,	abuseHey thanks for writing this peice. You put words to my questioning at why those two were dueling. Of course, my mind still wanders, perhaps they were truly fighting over Kel should court Nealan or Dom, both fighting for a different opponent. Or maybe something more trivial, like Kel stepped on the Lioness's shoe or something. Interesting what the mind comes up with eh? Well I like your rendition. Keep writing! ~Cel PS- Have you read Trickster's Queen yet? I must say I guessed the major plot twist like 75 pages in, but I was surprised with the way it was presented. Do you know what I'm talking about?
Lioness Fury again 2004-09-26 ch 1, anon.	abuseHi, me again. I'm sorry. I read my review before...it hurt my eyes. So now you probably hate me because my review was demented and says nothing about your fic. Now, I really do like this fic. It's one of the things that capture a small, unexplained moment that I really love. You managed to capture so much character in a small dialogue, and also incorporated everything that was happening at the time. I'm impressed. Since I'm reading your post in Candice's thread at the moment, and for the first time in how long I'm logged out, I'll also anonymously flame this fic.
Tuathail 2004-08-22 ch 1,	abuseaww u've changed. i remember those days when u used to laugh at my random fics...now u think they're grammerless and cliche... anyway, great fic! i like very much. write more. p.s. don't mind me, i'm just ** about my english teacher atm and dishing out on ppl who care about grammer and i read ur bio.
Reweiver Toidi 2004-08-13 ch 1, anon.	abuseu call th@ crap riting? god if u dont kno how 2 rite, than dont. & alana and kel wood NEVA duel each other. kel woud be 2 afraid and starstruk. nxt time rite sumthing worth reading. & i am happy myself th@ u didnt continu. those morons actully lieked it? theay need a life.
Saerwen 2004-08-02 ch 1,	abuseWOW! this ROCKS! it's very good, very good. i'm off to read ur other story, cause it looks awesome too!
Nolee of Stone Mountain 2004-05-24 ch 1,	abuseThis is really good. It gives a reasonable and logical reason for a duel. I've read fics before that give reasons for stuff in books, and it comes out sounding stupid and inane. YOU on the other hand, did very good. ¡El trabajo bueno y yo esperan más cuentos de usted pronto!
Lily the Looter 2004-05-20 ch 1,	abuseinteresting. I really enjoyed it. only one problem that I saw: you haven't updated since christmas! please don't give up on this story, and forsake us poor readers!
Death Goddess Assassin 2004-04-17 ch 1,	abuseLol, I loved this fic. It's great. ^.^ I love the part about the whole Alanna-hag thing. It was great! Have you read The Assignment, by Nolee of Stone Mountain? It's good. I dunno why I'm telling you this. Another random comment from me I guess. X_X I have those MOMENTS. But ANYWAY. You're on my profile, near the end. 'Cause you're one of my favorite reviewers. Woo. Okay, bye.
Numair's Wildmage 2004-04-12 ch 1,	abuseTHERE MUST BE A CHAPTER TWO! I LOVE IT!

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