Wow... this was dark, poor Tsuzuki... i feel so sorry for him. How could Hisoka do such a thing to him after Muraki done the same thing to him(Hisoka). Hisoka just made himself no better then Muraki himself. Do you think you are going to make a sequel to this story?

LOL! OMG! That was awesome. Poor Tsuzuki. =^.^= It was kind of funny because I was thinking that... hey he must have learned some tricks from Muraki. ;) I guess so. Go Hiskoa, Go!

Hello, I reviewed this on Adultfanfiction so I wanted to review it here, too. I really like the seme!Hisoka and the uke!Tsuzuki. I hate it when people make Hisoka the sterotypical uke just because he's smaller. That rule is so old and so overused! And I hate how they always turn him into a girl. People, besides his youthish looks does he come OFF as girlish in personality? I vote no. Hell, even the CREATOR thinks Tsuzuki would be uke even when it comes to Hisoka! Plus, Tsuzuki has so much uke evidence piled up behind him there can be no doubt. Anyway, I liked this story and I really hope you'll make another Hisoka/Tsuzuki fic someday. (Because that's the TRUE way it should be. ^_~)

in my opinion, this was really deep. u should write more on shots like this

oh my god that was sad!! oo''
But I like how you stuck to thier characters some people don't and it drives me crazy!
loved it
-may~uh

good

i am seriously disturbed...those two were my favourite couple...until this ficcie that is...(sighs sadly,brightens up considerably)it was a nice non-con though!it just the pairing...

This is a very dark fic. I don't know who I feel sadder for: Hisoka or Tsuzuki. I think it's well done.

oh~
nice..
i like it.
i love bondage.
i love dominance and submission.

*gapes like a landed fish* O_O *proceeds to stare... and stare... and stare at this fic* O_O;; I admit that I like HisxTsu better than TsuxHis (For what reason? I don't know...) But this Hisoka kinda scared me... ^^;; Poor Tsuzuki... I think you are VERY successfull in writing your first non-con fic! ^^

Wow, that had to be the deepest PWP with out fluff I've ever read. Nice work.

Awesome! This is very good; an angle I never would have thought of. Half way through I was thinking Hisoka was possessed, by Muraki or someone. But I like this idea much better. Yeah, like who really knows what's behind that façade? Great job. I salute anyone who writes non-con well. Tough thing to do.

I don't think I've ever seen Hisoka so out of character. Artistic license my **! You've practically given him a brain transplant with the way he's behaving. Hisoka would never ever hurt Tsuzuki purposefully. His goal in life is to protect Tsuzuki from harm. This Hisoka is ridiculous. Sure, go ahead and write NCS, but a story like this would be better as original fiction if you just changed the names and maybe a few details.

Um...
I liked the last paragraph (minus the sentence about Muraki). I liked the last paragraph a lot, because it explains Hisoka's feelings, and shows his emotions, and it's both believeable and touching, while painful.
My issue with the rest of the fic (apart from finding it difficult to swallow that Hisoka would go to the lengths of dressing up like that) is that I am a bdsm dom, and am extremely uncomfortable with writing that blurs the boundary between bdsm and NCS (yes, I have also been raped, which is perhaps I have such difficulties with fic that blurs boundaries between bdsm and NCS). The two, to me, are poles apart, and I guess what bothers me is that there are a lot of people who don't really understand this. I suspect *you* do - you seem intelligent and knowledgeable from your writing...
For me, more insight into the psychology of the two characters throughout the fic would have been welcomed.
Don't take this as a flame, this is personal, gut-reaction feedback, and you have my email address should you wish to yell at me for my words.
Also, a piece of well-meaning advice - submit this to adultfanfiction.net, as I imagine at least someone (not me, I can assure you, as I write NC-17 fic) will complain that this is above the R-rating.

^_^
Hurray! This has to be only the 3rd bdsm Yami no Matsuei fanfic I've ever read, and I don't think there are many of thise laying around... :) Much less like this one! I think you pulled a decent scene, though Hisoka is probably going to have a very sore area himself for not using any lub, but other than that I think you pulled it great! Very nice, the not so common pairing. I'm not fan of TsuxHis, but HisxTsu is very interesting...
I wish I could write yaoi scenes like that... but anyway, I really liked the ending. Probably it could be worked a little bit more, but its still quite enthralling on the angsty side. Yeah, the reference to Muraki being good for something, priceless ^-^
Only thing I see that is not going to work, is the rating. Definitly not R, and if ff.net catches it, this story is probably going to be removed. But if you store it in somewhere else, give a link or something to us rabid fans! Keep the good work!