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| Acidburn 2007-06-25 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou have the beginings of a really good little story here, I think you could take it a little further with Ranma slowly winning her over and pulling away from Akane. The note he left was showing a depth that not many would ever associate with Ranma without serious change but you've blended it in so smoothly that it doesnt seem OC. I would really enjoy any expansion to this you may right. |
| 0K0 2007-03-05 ch 1,  | abusethat was great to bad its a oneshot |
| ryuma 2006-11-06 ch 1, | abusedo not forget to update |
| author 2006-10-23 ch 1, anon. | abusePersonally, I like it and you should write another chapter. However one criticism is that you have a bad habit about switching from past tense prose to present tense prose when describing something. Fix that and it will be fine. |
| Innortal 2006-10-17 ch 1, | abuseSeems like a remake of one I've read before. Still good. |
| griffenvamp 2006-10-16 ch 1, anon. | abuselike it alot and want to know if your going to expaned on it it is a realy good start to story for ranma and nabiki. |
| ranichan 2006-07-24 ch 1, | abuseshort && sweet, i love it! so adorable :) |
| Zaraky 2006-03-22 ch 1, | abusei likes |
| Umi 2005-09-08 ch 1, anon. | abuseI love the story line so far, please finish it. Only problem about the story is the fact that NABIKI IS WAY PRETTIER THAN AKANE! (ahem) Ja ne! :p |
| Al 2005-07-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseupdate please i love this story i really want to read more. |
| Aero Tendo 2005-04-19 ch 1, | abuseNot a bad beginning for a story. I think it has promise. The emotions that Nabiki showed in the story were nice and made her seem more 'human' while still keeping in touch with what fans know about her to a degree. The cake from Ranma was a very nice touch and totally unexpected but still plausible if he felt like he owed it. Though keeping it uneaten in THAT house until night was probably his biggest challenge! LOL! :) |
| Six-string Samurai 2004-12-07 ch 1, | abuseEnjoyable, though I found parts hard to read since you tend to skip around from past to present tense in the same paragraph. Other than that, the spelling and most of the grammar was fine. |
| ProphetWithAGun 2004-10-14 ch 1, | abuseI, personally liked it |
| old fool 2004-06-13 ch 4, | abusejust found your story. its is pretty good, i hope you continue it. |
| NoshMono 2004-01-25 ch 4, | abuseI kinda cheered when I found out that Chapter 4 has been uploaded. Good thing I was alone in the house or someone would habve thought of me to be off rocker. Do continue writing, as I will be waiting to immerse myself in the coming chapters with frenzy. Or something like that Anyway, I have to put in my 2 cents worth. I have to agree with dogbertcarroll, at least a bit. The 'invisible' reaction of everyone of Happi feeling Ranma is a bit OOC. But why look at the small in the middle of the white paper, right? Keep writing! |